Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and table illustrate the age of library members and the total loans at little chalfont library. The bar graph shows the total number of loans of ten years.

Overall, the highest number of library members were adults, whereas the lowest members age were adults 65 and over. While the category of loans of children's fiction and adult fiction were same and the rest categories were below 13%. The trend of total number of loans went upward in the whole period.

It is quite evident from the pie chart that the highest number of members was adults at 51% and the children represented at 22%. While the proportion of young adults and adults 65 and over were 15% and 12% respectively.

Furthermore, the category of books loan of children's fiction and adult fiction were same at 38%. While the rest categories remained lowest in 2016.

Meanwhile, in 2007 to 2016, the total number of loans started from 16,000 and it went steadily highest over the period and presented 21,000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features: adults form the largest membership group, the two fiction categories each account for 38% of loans, and lending generally rises over the period. The membership figures are reported accurately. However, the overview says loans rose throughout, although the line fluctuates, including declines after 2011 and in 2013; it is more accurate to describe an overall rise with some variation. The final figure is also given as 21,000 rather than approximately 21,700. The statement that all remaining loan categories were below 13% is broadly correct, but naming the 13% adult non-fiction share would make the comparison clearer. Some key trends are therefore less fully reported than the membership data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the membership and loan information. This makes the main comparisons easy to locate, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “Meanwhile” help signal shifts. The organisation is coherent, but cohesion is not always smooth. Several sentences begin with “While,” creating a fragment-like transition rather than a complete contrast, and “the rest categories” does not clearly specify which figures are being grouped. The final paragraph also compresses the decade-long trend into one sentence. To strengthen progression, group the chart’s fluctuations into a clear sequence and use references such as “this figure” or “the total” only when their meaning is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “category,” “represented,” and “trend,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. However, some word choices and collocations are noticeably awkward or imprecise, such as “the lowest members age,” “the category of books loan,” and “went steadily highest.” Repetition of “total number of loans” and “category” also limits flexibility. More precise terms would help distinguish membership shares from loan shares and describe changes in the line graph accurately. For example, use “smallest age group,” “loan category,” and “increased overall, despite fluctuations.” These improvements would make the report more natural and precise without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast clauses with “whereas” and “while,” and the main information is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with subject–verb agreement and sentence construction. For example, “the highest number of library members were adults” should use “was,” while “the category … were same” needs a singular verb and an article, such as “the categories … were the same.” The clauses beginning “While the proportion…” and “While the rest categories…” are not complete sentences as written. There are also tense and preposition problems in “in 2007 to 2016.” Practise forming complete contrast sentences and checking agreement in longer clauses.

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