Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts shows Little Chalfont Library members age and total amount of loans and the category between 2007 to 2016.

Overall, the member who joined the Chalfont library had diffrent age persons but adult above 50 were huge in number and small amount were children above 10. In 2016, total loan was taken for children fiction and took above 20k loans on that year.

From 2007 to 2016 Chalfont Library took a huge amount of loans from bank. In the starting point they started taking loans over 15k. Every year this amount risen and crossed the past amount. Strangely the amount dropped a little in 2013 but next year rised the number again. Finally in 2016 the total of loans crossed over 20000.

Specially in 2016 they took loans by different category. The huge loans taken for children's fiction and for adult audio books they took loans in a very minimum amount. But it's really strange to think about it because adult members were in huge number in the library than childrens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three chart topics and report the broad rise in loans, including the small fall in 2013 and recovery afterwards. However, the overview is unclear and some key information is inaccurate or missing. The age figures show adults aged 18–64 are the largest group at 51%, while children account for 22%; “adult above 50” and “children above 10” do not accurately describe these categories. The statement that children’s fiction took “above 20k loans” confuses a 38% share with the total annual loan figure. The trend also did not rise every year: it levelled off in 2008–09 and fluctuated later. To strengthen the report, give a clear overview of the main patterns and use accurate comparisons across all three visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, a description of the trend, and a paragraph on categories. This gives the reader some organisation, and time markers such as “From 2007 to 2016” and “Finally” help indicate sequence. However, progression is weakened by unclear references and repetitive wording, especially repeated use of “loans” and “amount.” The overview combines age information with a confusing claim about children’s fiction, while the final paragraph shifts to a personal reaction (“it’s really strange”) rather than developing a chart comparison. Use clearer links between the visuals and organise each paragraph around one chart or comparison. Avoid unsupported commentary and make references such as “this amount” precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “total,” “category,” “dropped,” and “crossed,” so the general subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the data difficult to interpret. For example, “took loans from bank” suggests borrowing money rather than library lending, and “adult audio books” is described as a “very minimum amount” instead of a small share. “Huge” is repeated and is too informal or imprecise for describing chart values. There are also spelling errors such as “diffrent,” “childrens,” and “rised.” Aim for precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “share,” “increased,” and “declined,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to combine ideas using “but” and “because.” Frequent errors in sentence formation and verb use make several statements awkward or unclear. For example, “The charts shows” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Every year this amount risen” is missing the auxiliary verb and uses an incorrect verb form. “In the starting point they started taking loans” also has an unclear grammatical construction, and “the member who joined … had diffrent age persons” is difficult to parse. Work on agreement, articles, and consistent past-tense forms when describing the 2007–2016 data. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons and subordinate clauses.

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