Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The data show information about public library users based on their age group and total loans (in percentage) in a town called Little Chalfont.

Overall, individuals within the age of 18-64years old are the highest library members. Whereas, adults in their late 60's and above had the lowest membership.

Furthermore, in the loan category, children's fiction and adult fiction had the highest and equal loans respectively. While children's dvds recorded the lowest loan content, and had a slight similarity with the adult audio books.

The first year when they started recording the number of loans, it was at its lowest then the figure increased by the second year which kept fluatuating till the last year.

People aged 18-64years old had 51 members, which is the highest among other age group. On the other hand, Adults aged 65 and above are the lowest members with its figure as 12 memebrs. Conversely, the remaining two groups (children and young adults) were at the average of 15 and 22 members respectively.

In 2007, the amount of loans started off as low recording around 15,000 or more total loans whh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important features accurately: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group (51%), those aged 65 and over are the smallest (12%), and children’s and adult fiction each account for 38% of loans. You also note that children’s DVDs have the smallest share. However, the overview of loan totals is vague, and the response ends while describing 2007, so the chart’s full pattern is not reported. In particular, the total rises overall from about 15,700 to 21,700, despite fluctuations, and the intermediate years could be summarised. Also, the two remaining membership figures are reversed: children are 22%, while young adults are 15%. Covering all three visuals more fully and checking comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a paragraph giving membership details. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships between points. However, progression is uneven: the overview moves from membership to loan categories and then to the time series, while the final paragraph begins discussing 2007 but stops before completing the trend. Some transitions are also awkward or repetitive, and “Whereas” and “While” are used as sentence openings without being joined to a main clause. Organise the report into a clear overview followed by focused paragraphs for the membership/category data and the loan trend, and ensure each point is completed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “age group,” “membership,” “loan category,” “recorded” and “fluctuating,” and the main comparisons are generally understandable. There is some attempt to vary wording, for example “figure” and “amount of loans.” However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing statistics: “highest library members,” “lowest loan content” and “at the average” do not clearly express the intended comparisons. Spelling errors such as “fluatuating,” “memebrs” and “whh” also reduce accuracy. Prefer standard report language such as “accounted for,” “share of loans” and “the figure stood at,” and proofread carefully for spelling and precise collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons and clauses introduced by “which” and “while.” The meaning is usually recoverable, but errors recur in sentence construction and grammatical control. For example, “Whereas, adults…” is a fragment, and “While children’s dvds recorded…” is also left without a main clause. The phrase “18-64years old” needs clearer spacing and a grammatical form such as “aged 18–64,” while “Adults aged 65 and above are the lowest members” has an awkward comparison structure. The final sentence is incomplete. Build complete sentences around contrast clauses, use consistent past tense for the 2016 data, and check punctuation and sentence endings.

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