Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart and table illustrates the age of library members and total loans by category in the period of 2016. The bar chart illustrate the overall loans from 2007 to 2016. These three charts are describing the Little Chalfont Librar

Overall, in the pie chart adults are accounted higher share of members in library of adults while, young adults accounted for fewer members. In loan category childrens fiction and adults fiction are with same proportions of share whereas, childrens dvds accounted for least contribution although there is a fluctuation in the number of loans.

Adults from 18-24 age are accounted for 51 percentage which is higher than the all categories, children stands with the proportion of 22 percentage meanwhile, young adults and adults 65 and above age are with just 12 and 15 percentages respectively. The loan category

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the charts and give a broad comparison, noting that adults form the largest membership group and that children’s and adult fiction have equal shares of loans. However, the report is only partial: it stops while introducing the loan categories and gives no account of the loan trend from 2007 to 2016, despite this being a major chart. Some figures are also misreported: the 51% group is adults aged 18–64, not “18–24,” and the 12% and 15% figures for older adults and young adults are reversed. The overview’s reference to fluctuations is not developed with figures or a clear trend. The response is also 11 words below the required minimum. Cover all three visuals accurately and complete the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening identifies the visuals, an overview follows, and a paragraph begins with membership figures. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is incomplete because the final paragraph breaks off at “The loan category,” and the line chart is not discussed. Connections between ideas are also awkward or repetitive, as in “whereas” being used to join comparisons without clear sentence boundaries. The overview combines several points in one long sentence, making the relationships harder to follow. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the introduction, overview, membership and loan information, and ensure each paragraph is completed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “share,” “accounted for,” and “fluctuation,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “higher share of members in library of adults,” “least contribution,” and “in the period of 2016.” “Overall loans” is also less precise than “total number of loans.” The repeated use of “share,” “proportion,” and “accounted for” limits flexibility, while “Librar” is an incomplete spelling. Aim for concise, accurate collocations and vary the language used to describe percentages and trends; this will make the report clearer without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses comparison structures, but control is uneven. Subject–verb agreement is incorrect in “The bar chart illustrate,” and the opening sentence has an awkward article and number pattern in “The pie chart and table illustrates.” Several sentences are difficult to parse because clauses are joined with commas, as in “adults are accounted higher share … while, young adults accounted for fewer members.” The unfinished final phrase also leaves a sentence incomplete. Most statements rely on simple present-tense patterns, with limited variety in sentence structure. Practise accurate agreement, articles and plural forms, and use clear sentence boundaries when comparing categories. A wider range of controlled structures would improve readability.

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