Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts provided data about public library in a twon called little chalfont.In this data we have different age of person visites the libray in every year. And also give some information about loans.

First the high vale of visting the library is adults its 18to64 age people . The next children are coming around 22 % at every years. After that the young adults like 13to 17 is 15% and last one adults its age 65 and its over age persons comed 12 % of every years.

second the loans category ,there are six in 2016 .First the fiction and non fiction , children fiction is 38% and non fiction is 6% . adults fiction are same 38% but the non fiction is 13% . Now the young adults areond 2% and adults audio books 2% the last one is children dvd is only 1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You report several figures from the two 2016 charts, including the 51% share for adults aged 18–64, the 22% for children, and the loan shares for fiction and non-fiction. However, the response omits the line graph entirely, so it does not summarise the library’s loan trend from 2007 to 2016 or provide an overview of the main features across all the visuals. Some descriptions are also unclear, such as saying adults are the “high vale” without giving the 51% figure. The task’s 150-word minimum is not met. To improve, cover all three visuals, select the key comparisons, and state an overall trend before giving supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, discusses member ages, and then moves to loan categories using “First” and “second.” This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and the two main topics are separated. However, there is no paragraphing, and the progression is incomplete because the line graph is not discussed. Several transitions are mechanical or unclear, particularly “After that” and “Now,” while the opening sentence does not clearly explain how the visuals relate. Group the information into a brief introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, and use linking phrases to show comparisons rather than simply listing categories.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fiction,” “non fiction,” “loans,” and “young adults,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the report difficult to follow: “high vale of visting,” “person visites,” and “comed” are not appropriate forms. Repetition of “adults” and “children” also makes the descriptions less precise. Use standard chart-reporting language such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “the largest proportion,” and check spelling and collocations. More accurate vocabulary would help you describe the figures and trends clearly without relying on vague phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences rely on simple structures, and there are attempts to connect ideas, for example, “The next children are coming around 22%.” However, frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and punctuation make the report hard to read. The opening has a run-on structure, and phrases such as “adults its 18to64 age people” and “adults its age 65 and its over age persons” do not form clear grammatical relationships. Verb forms are also inaccurate in “people visites” and “persons comed.” Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, use consistent present-tense reporting forms, and separate sentences with full stops.

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