Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

this chart summarize the data of public library in form of table,graph and a pie chart regarding the total loans by category,total number of loans from year 2007 to 2016 and age of library members.

Overall the higest numbers of members people in terms in of age.In terms of totals loan by category have the highest percentage children's fiction and adult non fiction.And last insight from the given graphical data we can see that highest no of loans are 20000 and above.

If we see closely the ages of members we can analyze clearly higer number among them are 51 members which belong to age group of 18 to 64 refered as adults while 22 of them belongs to children.In terms of total loans category we can see that highest among them are adult non-fictions,adult fiction and children's fiction ranging from 13% to 38% inclusive.While the total number of loans are highest in [redacted phone] and [redacted phone] having values 20000 and above.

On the other hand the number of people in age group of young adults ages 13 to 17 and adults ages 65 and above have less part in the library membership.Also the total loans by category have adult audio books,young adults,children's dvd and children's non fiction with less percentages ranging from 1-6% inclusive.Total number of loans in years from 2007 to 2009 and 2013 are in range 15000 to 20000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and provide an overview, identifying the largest membership group and the generally high loan totals. Several details are accurate: adults aged 18–64 account for 51, and the loan chart peaks at about 21,700 in 2016. This meets the task well, with some comparison and selection of key features. However, the overview misidentifies the leading loan categories: adult fiction and children’s fiction are joint leaders at 38%, whereas adult non-fiction is 13%. The description of the loan trend is also imprecise: totals were above 20,000 in 2010–12 and 2014–16, but the peak was not simply “20,000 and above.” To strengthen the response further, report the overall rise from 2007 to 2016 and the fluctuations more precisely, and distinguish the two leading categories from the smaller ones.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing membership and loans. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement, and phrases such as “If we see closely” and “On the other hand” signal movement between points. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several chart features are combined in long sentences, and the linking phrases can feel mechanical. For example, the overview moves from membership to loan categories and then to annual totals without clearly stating the main pattern in each. Group the information more deliberately—membership figures together, category shares together, and the time trend together—and use clearer references such as “the annual total” rather than repeatedly saying “total number of loans.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “age group,” “percentage,” “category,” and “values,” so the reader can generally understand which features you are describing. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “we can analyze” and “ranging from.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “highest numbers of members people,” “less part in the library membership,” and “highest no of loans” are not natural expressions. Spelling errors such as “higest,” “higer,” and “refered” also reduce precision. Build a more reliable set of chart-description phrases, for example “the largest age group,” “accounted for,” and “the lowest shares,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses beginning with “If we see closely” and “while,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, particularly in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. The opening sentence lacks a clear verb structure (“this chart summarize”), while “the higest numbers of members people” is difficult to parse. In “22 of them belongs to children,” the verb does not agree with the plural subject, and several sentences run together without appropriate spaces after commas or full stops. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related points with accurate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries carefully; these changes would make your comparisons much easier to follow.

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