Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart shows that age of library children , young adults ,adults , and adults 65 & above. secondly the table illustarte the percentage of the loans taken in year 2006. as well as the bar graph indicates year from 2007 to 2016 and y axis indicates amount which shown in thousands. the above mentioned pie cahrt , table and bar graph all the show

individual performance of the people who are lived in the little chalfont .

according to the chart adults are major occupying population inthe libarary where as adult 65 and over plays minor role in librabry environment .

Coming to the table children and adult fiction share equal percentage in the loan section .Howerver loans percentage are gradually increased expect in yera 2013 . in year 2007 the loan taken percentage is very low.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three visuals and report two relevant features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, while those aged 65 and over are the smallest, and children’s and adult fiction each account for 38% of loans. However, the response only minimally summarises the data. It gives no membership percentages, omits most loan categories, and does not describe the loan totals’ overall movement from 15,700 in 2007 to 21,700 in 2016. The claim that loans increased except in 2013 is incomplete: totals also fell after 2011 and rose again in 2014. You also mistakenly call the loan table data from 2006; it is for 2016. The response is 10 words below the required minimum. Select and compare more key figures, and give a clear overview of the decade-long trend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the visuals, followed by comments on membership and loans. Connectors such as “secondly,” “Coming to the table,” and “However” show an effort to guide the reader. Nevertheless, the ideas do not progress clearly through all three visuals, and the bar-chart discussion is mixed into the table commentary. The opening repeats that the visuals show information about the library without establishing the main trends, while the final sentence does not provide a complete summary. Some linking is also inaccurate or unclear, such as “However” before a statement that does not clearly contrast with the previous point. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs and organise the details by visual, with an overview before supporting comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “loans,” “population,” and “bar graph,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “adults are major occupying population” and “plays minor role in library environment” do not express the chart comparisons naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “illustarte,” “cahrt,” “libarary,” and “Howerver.” Aim for precise data-reporting language such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “rose,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid vague phrases such as “individual performance,” which do not describe what the charts measure.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including “Coming to the table children and adult fiction share equal percentage in the loan section.” However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction, articles, agreement, and tense are frequent enough to make parts of the response hard to understand. For instance, “age of library children” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “adults are major occupying population” has an incorrect verb pattern. The opening also shifts between sentence fragments and a run-on construction, and “people who are lived” uses an incorrect verb form. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences, using articles and plural forms accurately, and separating complete sentences with appropriate punctuation. A few well-controlled comparisons would be more effective than long, faulty sentences.

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