Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are total two charts, one is pie chart which gives the information about a public library called Little Chalfont, the second one is the bar chart which compare the total number of loans according to the given time period.

According to the bar chart the number of loan taken in 2007 is 16,000 that is little bit higher than 15,000. If we compare 2007 to 2016 you can see it clearly that in 2016 the total number of loan which is approximately 21,000, is way much higher than the other previous years. This concludes that, the people of every age got a loan in 2016. Now compare this to the above pie chart which illustrate the percenage of which group took the mostloans in 2016 for Little Chalfont library.

This overall concludes that the children who are 22% took 38% of loan for fiction books while there is only 6% for non fiction books and 1% for the DVDs. The young adults (13-17) who are 15% took a 2%. And as for adults (18-64 and 65+) who are 63% total took approximately 38% of loan for fiction, 13% for non fiction and 2% for audio books.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main chart types and report several relevant figures, including the 2016 membership shares and loan-category percentages. However, the response only partly summarises the visual information: the age-group chart is not clearly introduced or described, and the line chart’s overall pattern is reduced mainly to a comparison between 2007 and 2016. The claim that “people of every age got a loan in 2016” is not shown by the data. Some comparisons are also unclear: the 22% figure refers to children’s membership, not the share of loans they took, while the 38% is children’s fiction loans. Include a concise overview of the main trends and distinguish membership proportions from loan categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from the charts to the loan trend and then to category figures. Linking phrases such as “According to the bar chart” and “And as for adults” help signal the topic. However, progression is uneven: the age-membership information is not separately explained, and “This overall concludes” does not clearly connect the preceding figures to a summary. The repeated use of “This concludes” and “Now compare this” makes the links somewhat mechanical, while references such as “the above pie chart” are less precise because the task includes multiple charts. Organise the response around an overview followed by clearly grouped details, and use more exact references to each chart.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the basic subject, including “total number of loans,” “fiction,” “non fiction,” and “audio books.” There is some variation in phrasing, but several choices are imprecise or informal for an academic summary: “way much higher,” “got a loan,” and “took a 2%” do not describe the data naturally. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form issues, including “percenage” and “mostloans.” Use standard chart-reporting collocations such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “rose to,” and check compound terms and spelling. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish library membership from borrowing shares.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including comparisons and clauses beginning “while” and “who.” However, control is inconsistent. For example, “the second one is the bar chart which compare” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the total number of loan which is approximately 21,000, is way much higher than the other previous years” has an awkward relative clause and comparison structure. Articles and plurals are also unreliable in phrases such as “There are total two charts” and “number of loan.” Punctuation around introductory phrases and embedded clauses is sometimes distracting. Aim for shorter, controlled sentences first, then add complex structures where the relationships between figures are clear.

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