Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts provide information about local library called Little Chalfont.

After analyzing, it can be clearly seen that majority of members was around 18 to 64 years old with 51%. Moreover, children was second highest members with 22%. Then, there was identical difference between young adults and adults over 65 years old.

Furthermore, at the begining of period number of loan taken was 15000 which is the lowest number in period. Moreover, this number was increased slightly and almost 18000 in next twi years. Furthermore, again this number was increases slightly and almost 22000 from 2010 to 2012. Then, this number was drop to 19000 in next year but at the last term of the period, we saw a little more increased 23000 which was highest amount over the period.

Overall, my ost childrens who joinded the library was aroun 51% and thet is the highest perecentage. Furthermore, highest number of loan took in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify some relevant features, including the largest membership group and the overall rise in loans, but the response only partially reports the charts. The overview is inaccurate: the final paragraph says children made up about 51% of members, whereas this figure belongs to adults aged 18–64; children accounted for 22%. The comparison between young adults and older adults is also unclear, and the loan-category chart is not described at all. Several loan figures are imprecise or incorrect: the total in 2016 was about 21,700, not 23,000, and the peak was not clearly reported as such. To improve, give a concise overview of the main patterns and select accurate comparisons from all three charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from membership figures to loan totals and then to a concluding statement. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is weakened by repeated linking words such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “Then,” which often connect sentences without clarifying the relationship between the information. The final paragraph also repeats a claim from earlier and contradicts it by identifying children as the largest group. Use clearer paragraphing to cover membership, loan categories, and the trend over time, and make the overview consistent with the details. More precise referencing would also help readers follow which figures “this number” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the general subject and some trends, including “increased,” “drop,” and “highest.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “number of loan taken” and “a little more increased” are not natural ways to describe totals, while “identical difference” does not clearly express the comparison intended. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “begining,” “twi,” “joinded,” and “perecentage.” Build a more precise set of terms for describing proportions and trends, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, with some attempts to link clauses using “which” and “but.” Frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction make several sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “majority of members was” needs a plural or correctly formed singular construction, and “this number was increases” has an incorrect verb form. In “children was second highest members,” both agreement and the structure of the comparison need attention. The final sentence, “my ost childrens who joinded the library was aroun 51%,” is difficult to understand because the grammatical relationships are unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add varied complex structures.

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