Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie graph illustrates the percentage of library members by aged in 2016, while the bar graph demostrates the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, library members of adults ( 18-64 ) had the higest figure, while aged over 65 was the least common. Adult fiction and children's fiction were the largest loans, while total number of loans fluctuated throught the period.

Turning to pie chart, adults accounted for 51% of total library members, followed by children, at 22%, remaining age group young adults and adult over 65 had the fewers figure, at 15% and 12%, respectively. However, children's fiction and adult fiction recorded as same level at 38% each, wherease, adult audio books were the minimal at only 2% of loans.

According to bar graph, total number of loans were just more than 15,000 in 2007, then it experienced growth to around 19,000. In 2011 total number of loans rose to 21000, before dropping to 19,000 in 2009. By 2013, total loaner had decreased to just below 20,000, subsquenctly, it againt recovered to 22,000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, those over 65 the smallest, fiction leads the loan categories, and total loans generally rise despite fluctuations. The figures for membership and the equal 38% shares for adult and children’s fiction are accurate. However, the category comparison is incomplete: adult non-fiction at 13% and children’s non-fiction at 6% are not reported, and the statement that audio books were the minimum at 2% overlooks children’s DVDs at 1%. The loan trend also contains a factual sequencing error: loans reached about 21,000 in 2011, then fell to around 19,600 in 2013; the reference to dropping in 2009 is out of order. Covering these details more accurately would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the charts. Sequencing phrases such as “Overall,” “Turning to,” and “According to” help signal the stages of the report. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and the final paragraph’s chronology is confusing: after describing the 2011 peak, it says loans dropped “in 2009,” which disrupts the progression. The sentence beginning “However” also joins two category comparisons without a clear relationship. Organise the loan figures strictly by year and use more precise links between comparisons, so the reader can follow the data without having to resolve inconsistencies.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “followed by,” “fluctuated,” and “recovered,” and the meaning is generally understandable. However, several spelling errors and inaccurate word forms reduce precision: “demostrates,” “higest,” “fewers,” “loaner,” and “subsquenctly.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “members by aged” and “recorded as same level.” Use standard collocations such as “members by age,” “accounted for the same proportion,” and “the smallest share.” The range is adequate for describing the charts, but repeated reliance on “total number of loans” and imprecise expressions limit flexibility. Proofreading spelling and choosing more natural data-reporting phrases would strengthen this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including the overview contrast with “while” and the trend sequence using “before.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “by aged” has an incorrect grammatical form, and “total number of loans were” has a subject–verb agreement problem; “adults accounted for 51% of total library members” also needs an article or possessive determiner before “total.” The sentence “children’s fiction and adult fiction recorded as same level” is missing a suitable verb construction and article. There is also awkward punctuation around the parenthetical age range. Aim for accurate sentence patterns such as “The total number of loans was…” and “Both categories accounted for the same share.”

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