Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It compares the age of library members and total number of loans from 2007 to 2016 in Little Chalfont library.
Overall, the total number of loans by age of library members from 2007 to 2016.
On the one hand, the adults between 18 to 64 covered the largest portion of library. The minimum portion is taken between young adult 13 to 17 accounted by 15 % of portion and adults of 65 age accounted 12% of portion. The children covered the largest portion of library about 51%.
On the other hand, the children fiction and adult fiction taken the largest amount of loans about 38%, the adult and children's non fiction taken the maximum amount of loan about 6 to 13 %. The children DVDs , young adults and adult audio books taken the minimum amount of loan from library. In 2016 taken the largest amount loan about 22,000 then 2007 about 16,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the charts’ general subject and include several relevant figures, such as the 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction and the rise in loans from about 16,000 in 2007 to 22,000 in 2016. However, the overview is unclear: “the total number of loans by age of library members” does not accurately summarise the main patterns. There is also a significant misreading of the membership chart: adults aged 18–64 are the largest group at 51%, but you say children account for 51%; children are 22%. The description of the loan categories is partly accurate, though “maximum” for non-fiction is imprecise. To improve, give a clear overview and report the main comparisons accurately, especially the membership proportions and the overall loan trend.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has some paragraphing and attempts to organise information with “Overall,” “On the one hand,” and “On the other hand.” These signals show an effort to group the charts, but the progression is not consistently clear. The overview sentence is incomplete in meaning, and the two “hand” paragraphs do not establish a useful contrast between the data sets. Within the first body paragraph, membership figures are presented in a confusing order, while the final sentence shifts abruptly to loan totals. Use a clear sequence: overview first, then one paragraph on membership and loan categories, followed by the trend over time. Linking expressions should reflect the actual relationship between points rather than simply mark a new paragraph.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “total number of loans,” “largest portion,” and “non fiction,” and the main topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “Portion of library” is not a natural way to describe the share of members, and “taken the largest amount of loans” is an awkward collocation. “Maximum amount” and “minimum amount” are also less precise than language describing percentages or shares. Aim to use terms such as “accounted for,” “represented,” “share,” and “loan category,” while varying repeated phrases. Check compound forms such as “non-fiction” and use “membership” or “members” rather than “library” when describing the age breakdown.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response communicates its broad subject through mostly simple sentence patterns, but grammatical control is inconsistent and attempts at longer structures are often faulty. For example, “Overall, the total number of loans by age of library members from 2007 to 2016” is a sentence fragment, while “the children fiction and adult fiction taken the largest amount” lacks a correctly formed verb. There are also errors in comparison patterns and articles, as in “adults between 18 to 64” and “the children DVDs.” The final sentence, “In 2016 taken the largest amount loan,” is difficult to follow because it has no clear subject. Practise complete sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and use consistent forms such as “from 18 to 64” and “loans rose to.”
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