Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This pie chart, table and bar chart shows information about a public library in a town known as little chalfont, these are releated selecting or reporting the m,ain features,also make comparisons,

Overall, bar-chart illustrates the age of library members in 2016, the table about total loans by category (2016) , numbers of loans 2007 to 2016 below in bar chart,

First of all, 51% adults age of 18 to 64 library members in 2016, very low amount of adults 65 and over, 12%, and some amount of youth and children,

On the other hand, The highest amount of loans by children's fiction category 38% while there are aslo 38% of adult fiction, in this table the lowest amount of loans in 2016 is children's DVDs 1%, smae as 2% young adults, middle amount was loans by category of adult non-fiction 13%, 6% children's non-fiction whereas 2% adult audio books,

Furthermore, barchart shows the results of loans in 2007 to 2016, amount of total loans in 2007 very low then after, in 2007 it was 15,000, "but" 2016 it grow up round about 23,000,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three visuals and report several relevant figures, including the 51% share of members aged 18–64 and the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction. You also note that children’s DVDs account for the smallest loan share. However, the overview is not clearly expressed: it describes what each visual shows rather than summarising the main patterns. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: 2% is the share for young adults and adult audio books, not the lowest figure, and loans rose from about 15,700 in 2007 to about 21,700 in 2016, rather than 15,000 to 23,000. The age figures for children and young adults are also omitted. Select the key comparisons and report the trend more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, comments on membership and loan categories, and a final paragraph about the loan trend. Linking phrases such as “First of all,” “On the other hand,” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, progression is weakened by an overview that mostly repeats what the visuals contain, and the final trend discussion is cut short. Some connections are unclear or mechanically expressed, particularly “while” and “whereas” in the long sentence listing loan categories. Organise the response into a clear introduction, a concise overview of the main patterns, and focused detail paragraphs. Group related figures together and use comparisons to connect them, rather than relying mainly on sequencing phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary such as “library members,” “total loans,” “category,” and “adult fiction,” so the reader can generally identify the subject of each point. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “very low amount,” “some amount of youth,” and “it grow up.” Spelling errors such as “releated,” “aslo,” and “smae” also reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise chart language: describe percentages as “shares” or “proportions,” and use verbs such as “accounted for,” “rose,” and “remained.” Check spelling carefully, and avoid repeating “amount” when describing percentages or loan totals.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “51% adults age of 18 to 64 library members” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “in 2007 it was 15,000, but 2016 it grow up” has problems with tense, sentence construction, and the preposition before the year. The opening sentence is also incomplete and contains punctuation problems. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Adults aged 18–64 made up 51% of members.” Practise past-tense forms for the historical data and separate long lists into shorter, correctly punctuated sentences.

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