Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart illustrates a public library in a town known as Little Chalfont.

Overall, the highest rate of the library members are of adults in the pie chart. While, lowest rate is of adults 65 and over. In the table of total loan categories children's fiction as well as young adults are at highest percentage than others. Moreover, total number of loans have overall same rate throughout the years.

In detail, the age of library members varies greatly in 2016 such as highest proportion is of adults from age 18 to 64 than children's at 22. Meanwhile, young adults from 13 to 17 age also adults 65 over are approximately at same rate.

In term of total number of loans by category in 2016, the largest proportion is of children's and adult fiction at 38 percent while the lowest figure is of children's dvd just 1 percent after that young adults and adult audio books at same figure of 2 percent.

Turning to the total number of loans between 2007 to 2016, the highest rate is in 2016 slighlty above 20,000 but the lowest figure is in 2007 which is just more than 15,000 in the bar graph.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and loans are highest in 2016 and lowest in 2007. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. The overview calls adults aged 65 and over the smallest group, although young adults are slightly smaller (12% versus 15%); it also says children’s fiction and young adults have the highest loan percentages, when adult fiction ties children’s fiction at 38% and young adults account for only 2%. The claim that loans stayed at “the same rate” overlooks the rise from about 15,700 to 21,700 and the fluctuations in between. More precise reporting of these patterns would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for membership, loan categories, and the trend over time. This makes the three visuals easy to follow, and transitions such as “In detail” and “Turning to” help signal shifts. The progression is generally logical, but some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly “While” beginning a fragment after the overview’s first sentence and “Moreover” introducing a claim that does not clearly connect to the preceding point. The membership paragraph also combines several comparisons without clearly stating the figures for each group. To strengthen the flow, use complete, directly connected sentences and organise each paragraph around a clear comparison or trend.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “proportion,” “largest,” “lowest figure,” and “approximately,” so the reader can understand the general subject of each paragraph. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “highest rate of the library members,” “same rate,” and “at highest percentage than others.” Repetition of “rate” and “figure” also limits the range of language used to describe shares and totals. There are spelling and form issues, including “slighlty” and “dvd,” and “loan categories” would be clearer as “loan categories” only when referring to the groups, or “shares of loans” when describing percentages. Aim for accurate collocations and distinguish membership proportions from loan totals.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including comparisons and clauses introduced by “while,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless reduce precision. For example, “the highest rate of the library members are of adults” has faulty agreement and sentence construction, while “children’s at 22” omits the noun and unit needed to complete the comparison. “In term of” and “between 2007 to 2016” show problems with grammatical patterns and prepositions. The sentence beginning “While, lowest rate…” is not a complete sentence, and punctuation around “While” is incorrect. Practise forming complete comparison sentences, checking subject–verb agreement, and using consistent patterns such as “from … to …” for time periods.

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