Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates the total number of loans and various category in a public library with in a village named Little Chalfont.

Overall, adults between the age group of 18-64 hold half the portion who tends to visit library in the year 2016. however, adults over 65 remains at least member in library.In the category of loans took in 2016 both childrens fiction and adults fiction occupies largest portion compared with others although, there are total number of loans took in between 2007 and 2016.In which

2016 reaches highest numer of loan taken additionally, 2015 and 2011 remains at list of second highest number of loans taken in between 2007 and 2016

in 2016 age of library numbers are mostly from adults then thw children continueing young adults and adults over 65. moreover,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant features: adults aged 18–64 make up the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and loans peak in 2016. However, the overview is unclear and some comparisons are inaccurate: 2015 and 2011 are not both the second-highest years, since 2015 is below 2011 and 2014. The response also gives little usable detail about the loan categories or the changes across the decade, and the final sentence about membership is unfinished. The required minimum of 150 words is not met, which further limits how fully you can summarise the charts. Develop a clear overview and support it with accurate figures and comparisons from all three visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a later detail paragraph. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into one long overview, and the final paragraph trails off after “moreover,” without completing a point. Connections between the charts are also unclear; for example, the sentence beginning “although, there are total number of loans…” does not establish a clear relationship between category shares and the trend chart. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the overview and key details, and group related information together. Linking words should express the actual relationship between ideas rather than being added mechanically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “total number of loans,” “category,” “portion,” and “highest,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “hold half the portion,” “least member,” and “loans took in.” Repetition of “number of loans taken” also makes the description less precise. Spelling errors such as “numer” and “thw” further reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate chart-description phrases and use them consistently—for example, describe membership as a “share” or “proportion,” and say that loans “rose” or “reached a peak.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic structures to report comparisons, but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “adults over 65 remains” and “fiction … occupies,” while “there are total number of loans took in” combines structures incorrectly. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also problematic, as in “in a public library with in a village” and the run-on overview. Capitalisation after a full stop is inconsistent, and the final sentence is incomplete. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add one controlled comparison clause, checking subject–verb agreement and tense.

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