Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The three charts provide information about a total loans in public library in little Chalfont in 2016.

Overall, it ca be clearly seen from the table that there was an downward trend in the total of loans .another noticeable feature is that adults between 18 tO 64 recorded the gighest figure in the age of library memebers .

Looking at the details

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies one relevant feature: adults aged 18–64 formed the largest membership group. However, the overview incorrectly says loans showed a downward trend; the chart instead shows an overall rise from about 15,700 in 2007 to 21,700 in 2016, despite fluctuations. The response does not report the loan-category shares or describe the age figures beyond the largest group, and it ends before giving the promised details. It is also substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. To improve, provide a clear overview of the main patterns and support it with selected, accurate figures from all three visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview beginning with “Overall,” and a transition, “Looking at the details,” signals a further section. However, the response stops at that transition, so there is no developed progression or meaningful paragraphing across the three visuals. The link between the charts is also unclear: the opening refers to total loans in 2016, while the overview shifts to the trend and membership ages without explaining the relationships. The phrase “another noticeable feature” provides some connection, but punctuation and spacing around it are faulty. Complete the detail section and use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the overview and supporting comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “total loans,” “downward trend,” “adults,” and “highest figure,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is limited and some choices are inaccurate or awkward: “a total loans” is not a natural phrase, and “the highest figure in the age of library members” does not clearly express the intended comparison. Several spelling errors, including “memebers” and “gighest,” reduce clarity, while “little Chalfont” should use the proper name’s capitalisation. Use precise chart language such as “loan totals,” “membership share,” and “accounted for the largest proportion,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a complex overview structure with “Overall, it can be clearly seen … that,” and the clause about adults aged 18 to 64 is understandable in outline. However, the range is narrow, and errors in sentence construction and punctuation are frequent enough to make parts difficult to follow. For example, “there was an downward trend in the total of loans .another noticeable feature” has an article error, a missing sentence boundary, and an awkwardly joined new sentence. The opening also lacks a natural grammatical structure (“provide information about a total loans in a public library”). Practise accurate article use, complete sentence boundaries, and varied but controlled sentence patterns; then proofread for capitalisation and punctuation.

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