Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart illustrates the information about the local library in town called alittle chalfont.The different ages of library member in the2016. the percentage of child fiction and adult fiction was same and it was touch to the peak value.on the other hand the totall number of loan from 2007 to 2016.the loan in the 2016 was very higest number.

Firstly, it contain different categories the young adult and adult audio books percentage was same that was 2 percent. The childern nonfiction and adult fiction was maximum difference that was reach 6and 13 percent. The childern dvd,s percentage was very low that was 1 percent. while the childern fiction was 38 percent.On the other hand the total number of loan was started from 2007 to 2011 the value was fluctuate and it reach 15000, 17000,18000,,20,000, 21,000and 22,000. Moreover the loan that was started from 2012 to 20

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify relevant features, including the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction, the 2% figures for young-adult loans and adult audiobooks, and the low 1% share for children’s DVDs. However, the response only partially summarises the charts: it gives no clear account of the membership age profile, and the loan trend is incomplete and partly inaccurate. For example, the chart shows loans rising overall from about 15,700 in 2007 to 21,700 in 2016, with fluctuations, but your account stops mid-sentence after “2012 to 20”. The overview is also unclear, and “the 2016 was very higest” does not accurately express the main trend. The response is three words below the required minimum. Include a complete overview and report the key comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: you begin with an introduction, then use “Firstly” and “On the other hand” to move between information about loan categories and annual totals. These signals show an attempt to group and connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because several chart features are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences, and the response ends abruptly at “from 2012 to 20”. The contrast marker “On the other hand” does not always express a clear contrast, while repeated use of “the loan” makes references vague. Separate the age profile, category shares and yearly trend into clear paragraphs, and use linking phrases only where the relationship between points is explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, such as “percentage”, “categories”, “fluctuate” and “total number of loan”, and you identify several loan types. This gives the response a minimally adequate range for describing the charts. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning harder to understand: “higest”, “childern”, “nonfiction” and “totall” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “touch to the peak value” and “maximum difference that was reach”. Use standard chart language and check spelling carefully; for example, describe a figure as “the highest” or say that a value “peaked”, rather than using “touch to the peak”.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including a time comparison beginning “the total number of loan was started from 2007 to 2011”. However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation, tense, articles and agreement make several statements difficult to follow. For instance, “The different ages of library member in the2016” is a fragment, while “the percentage … was same” lacks an article and has an awkward singular construction. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, and the final sentence is unfinished. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense forms consistently when reporting the 2016 data and historical trend.

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