Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts mentioned below illsutrate information about a public library located in a town named little chalfont.

Overall, it is crystal clear that there is significant difference between the main features like people and years.The most noticeable feature in chart one is percentage of adults who have taken books from libaray and most significant feature in cahrt two is gross amount of loans .

The cahart number 1 shows the percentage of people who borrows the books. In the picture it can be seen that chlildren,s DVDs were at bottom made up only 1%.Chlidre,s fictions books were at top and represented 38%.Furthermore,non fictions at 6% .adlut audio and young adult were same.Chlildren fivtio

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a few relevant details from the category chart, including children’s DVDs at 1%, children’s fiction at 38%, and non-fiction at 6%. However, it does not adequately summarise the charts as a whole: the age profile and the loan trend from 2007 to 2016 are not reported, and the overview is vague rather than highlighting key comparisons. The claim that the first chart shows the percentage of people who borrow books also misidentifies its subject; it shows the age distribution of members. The response ends mid-sentence and contains only 113 words, below the required 150, leaving the task substantially incomplete. To improve, give a clear overview and select key figures and trends from all three charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening, an overview, and a paragraph beginning to describe chart one. Phrases such as “Overall” and “Furthermore” show some awareness of linking ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is vague, the charts are not clearly distinguished, and the final paragraph stops abruptly at “Chlildren fivtio”. The sentence “there is significant difference between the main features like people and years” does not establish a clear connection between the information. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the overview and the main comparisons, and connect details in a logical order rather than listing isolated figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “represented,” “percentage,” “loans,” and “non fictions,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. It also attempts more formal phrasing, such as “the most noticeable feature.” However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make words difficult to identify, for example “illsutrate,” “libaray,” “cahrt,” and “chlildren.” Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, including “gross amount of loans” and “at bottom.” The repeated use of “feature” and “chart” also limits range. Check spelling carefully and choose precise chart language, such as “accounted for,” “the largest share,” and “the total number of loans.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a more complex construction, as in “it can be seen that children’s DVDs were at bottom made up only 1%.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening overview has a missing article in “there is significant difference,” and “people who borrows the books” has a subject–verb agreement error. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly in “Furthermore, non fictions at 6% .adlut audio and young adult were same.” This fragment lacks a main verb, while the following comparison needs a clearer sentence structure. Practise complete sentences with accurate articles, agreement, and punctuation, then use a wider range of structures while checking each sentence for completeness.

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