Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and table demostrate the age of library members and the total loans by different catogories in 2016. Although the chart compares the total number of loans in a little chalfont from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, the adult 18-64 reported the highest number of members whereas,adult 65 and over experienced the lowest people.The children's fiction and adult fiction accounted for the same percentage of total loan while the chilldren DVDs recorded a lower proportion. regard to total number of loan, it went up and down over the given period although, it experienced grew from 2007 to 2016.

Age of library members in 2016, adult 18-64 reported the highest number of members at 51 whereas, young adults 13-17 and adult 65 and over experienced the lowest number at 15 and 12 respectively.The children showed the second larger number at 22%.In the total loans by different compositions,the children's fiction and adult fiction showed the same percentage of total loan at 38%. While the chilldren DVDs recorded a lower proportion at 1%. The children non'-fiction represented at 6%. The young adults annd adult audio books reported second lower value the same figure at 2%.

Total number of loans wentup and down through out the period although it increased from 2007 to 2016. it started at 16000 in 2007 after that steadily rise to 21000 at 2011 before dropping to 19000 in 2013 and stood at 22000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and provide a relevant overview: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction leads the loan categories jointly, and total loans rise overall despite fluctuations. Most figures are accurately selected, including the 51% adult membership, the matching 38% fiction shares, and the low 1% for children’s DVDs. The trend description is broadly correct, but the account of the line graph is less precise: loans rose to about 21,000 in 2011, then fluctuated, rather than falling steadily to 19,000 in 2013; the 2016 figure is about 21,700. The overview also calls the oldest group the lowest without clearly distinguishing it from young adults, who are slightly higher. More precise reporting and fuller comparison of the trend would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for membership/categories and the loan trend. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward: “Although” begins incomplete sentences in the introduction and overview, and “While” introduces a fragment in the category paragraph. The repeated use of “whereas” and “although” also makes relationships less clear, while the transition from the overview to detailed figures could be smoother. Organise each paragraph around a clear comparison, and use complete sentences with more precise links between ideas. This would make the progression easier to follow without changing the useful overall paragraph structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “accounted for,” “proportion,” “represented,” and “total number of loans,” so the meaning is generally clear and the range is adequate for describing charts. However, several spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word choices are noticeable, including “demostrate,” “catogories,” “chilldren,” “compositions,” and “second larger.” Phrases such as “experienced the lowest number” and “reported the highest number” are also not natural ways to describe chart figures. Repeated use of “number” and “percentage” limits flexibility. Check spelling carefully and choose standard chart language, for example “made up,” “accounted for,” “share,” and “the smallest group.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons and clauses with “although,” and the main information can usually be understood. However, complex structures are not consistently controlled. For example, “Although the chart compares…” is an incomplete sentence, as is “While the children DVDs recorded…”. There are also errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation, such as the lowercase “it” after a full stop and missing spaces after commas. In “it experienced grew,” the verb construction is faulty, and several clauses are joined in ways that obscure their relationship. Practise forming complete sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses accurately; review verb forms, articles, and punctuation.

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