Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart and the pie chart depicts the information about Little Chalfont library in a town and total number of loans between 2007 and 2016.
It is crystal clear that the lowest number of loans were in 2015 and the highest number of loans were in 2016 on adult diction and children's fiction,whereas the children's DVDs, young adult and adult audio books had the lowed proportion of loan. To begin with, the members are devided in four groups by age. The highest proportin was 51 which depicts adults aged between 18 to 64, whereas above 65 had the lowest proportion of 12 and 15 for young adults aged 13-17 and 22 for children.
Moving further, number of loans per year increases and shows a downward in 2013 and revived back to highest in 2016 and stood at around 22,000. The loan were divided into seven different categories and the maximum poroption of loan were on children's and adult fiction of 38%, Whereas the lowest proportion on adult audio books ,young adults and children's DVDs which were 2% ,2% and 1% respectively. the proportion for adult non fiction was 13% of the total.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You include all three visuals and report several relevant figures, including the 51% share of members aged 18–64, the equal 38% shares for adult and children’s fiction, and the rise to about 22,000 loans in 2016. However, the overview contains a major factual error: loans were not lowest in 2015; they were lowest in 2007, at about 15,700. The description of the trend is also too general to show its full pattern, which includes an early rise, a peak around 2011, a decline, and a recovery. Your opening overview also mixes the loan trend with category shares, making the main features less clear. Select the key trends accurately and summarise them before giving supporting details.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic overall structure, moving from an opening statement to details about membership, annual loans and loan categories. Phrases such as “To begin with” and “Moving further” signal transitions, and the reader can generally follow the topics. However, the progression is weakened because the second paragraph begins with an unclear overview that combines unrelated comparisons, and the first paragraph shifts abruptly from loan categories to age groups. Some linking is mechanical, while the final sentence about adult non-fiction feels added on rather than integrated. Organise the report by visual or theme, and use a clear overview followed by logically grouped details. More precise referencing would also help readers see which figures belong to each chart.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “categories,” “downward,” and “stood at around,” so the main subject is usually understandable. However, several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “adult diction” appears to mean adult fiction, “lowed” is used for lowest, and “revived back” is not a natural way to describe a recovery. “Crystal clear” is also too informal for an academic report, and “number of loans per year increases” does not accurately describe the fluctuating trend. Aim for accurate chart language and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “share,” “declined,” and “recovered” would help you describe the data clearly and appropriately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt some complex sentences, particularly with comparisons using “whereas,” and the meaning is often recoverable. However, errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction and agreement. For example, “The bar chart and the pie chart depicts” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “The loan were divided” has incorrect agreement. The opening sentence also has an awkward structure, and punctuation is inconsistent, including missing spaces after commas and a lower-case “the” beginning a new sentence. Sentence patterns are often joined into long, loosely controlled statements. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, then use a few well-controlled complex sentences to express comparisons.
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