Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The three charts illustrate the age of individuals (2016), the total loans by category (2016), the total figure of loans ([redacted phone]) in a Little Chalfont Library, respectively.

Overall, it is evident that the majority of population, who were serving in the library, were adults and they mostly obtained loans at the category of children's and adult fiction in 2016. Similarly, the total proportion of loans were fluctuating throughout the period between 2007 and 2016.

In the first graphic of the bar chart depicts that the age of community in the library, used to cut into four pieces and there were usually children and adults. It also demonstrates that young adults and over 65 aged population were not interested in reading books at library.

In the second graph which is a table depicts the total loans separating into categories. The fiction books were including the majority of loans in 2016.

In the final graphic of the bar chart manifests that the total figure of loans rose gradually from 2007 to 2011 whereas there was a dip between 2011 and 2013. The total amount of loans finally recovered and reached the peak to 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all three charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the main trends, such as the peak in loans and the popularity of fiction, the description of the age demographics is vague (e.g., 'used to cut into four pieces'). You mention that young adults and those over 65 were 'not interested,' which is an over-generalisation; the data simply shows lower participation. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide more precise data points to support your observations rather than general descriptions. The overview is present, but it could be more clearly linked to the specific data trends observed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'In the first graphic', 'In the second graph', 'In the final graphic'). The transition between sentences is occasionally abrupt, and some referencing is unclear, such as the phrase 'the majority of population, who were serving in the library'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph flows naturally into the next would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'fluctuating', 'gradually', and 'recovered'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'total figure of loans' instead of 'total number of loans' and 'the age of community' instead of 'the age distribution of library users'. Additionally, 'cut into four pieces' is not appropriate for describing a chart. To improve, focus on using more precise academic terminology and collocations related to data description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. For example, 'In the first graphic of the bar chart depicts' contains a redundant preposition, and 'the age of community... used to cut into' is grammatically incorrect. There are also issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and avoiding redundant prepositions.

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