Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

this chart illustrate the information about a public library in a town called little chartfont

in 2016 .

the pie chart show the age of the libarary members is is very important to knpw that which tyye and which age of people read library books .

22% children read library books 15% young adults their age between 13 to 17 years go to library to gain knowledge . adults is 51% between age 18 to 64 went to library and 12% those adults who are 65 and over 65%.

in the second chart shows the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.in 2007,15000 people take loans and in 2008 , the number of loans became higher that is nearly 20000 and in 2009 the number of loan is equal to 2008. the number of loan in 2010 is above 20000 and in 2011 it is slightly lower then 2010.

in 2007 the number of loan is lower as compare to 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task by describing the two charts, but the coverage is uneven. While you identify the main age groups and the trend in loans, the analysis lacks depth. For instance, you list the percentages for age groups but do not effectively compare them or highlight the most significant feature (e.g., that adults aged 18-64 represent the majority). Furthermore, the description of the loan trends is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear overview or summary of the overall trend from 2007 to 2016. To improve, ensure you group information logically and provide a clear 'overview' paragraph that captures the main trends rather than just listing data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; for example, the transition between the pie chart description and the line graph is abrupt. You rely on simple sentence structures, which makes the progression of information feel mechanical. To improve, use linking words such as 'whereas,' 'in contrast,' 'subsequently,' or 'furthermore' to connect your observations. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader through the data you are presenting.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same words, such as 'number of loans' and 'read library books.' There are also several spelling errors, such as 'libarary,' 'knpw,' and 'tyye,' which distract from the content. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate precision; for example, instead of saying 'the number of loans became higher,' you could use 'the number of loans increased significantly.' To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of synonyms and more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated,' 'peaked,' or 'accounted for.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'this chart illustrate,' 'the pie chart show'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or passive voice, which are essential for describing data in academic tasks.

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