Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts below provide information about a public library in a town called little Chalfont .
Overall, the chart give the information total number of loans year [redacted phone] and age of library members .
firstly , we focus on pi chart adults 18-64 was majorty and the children about 22 and adults over 65 was 12 and last young adults 13-17 was 15 .
However, lastly we see the total number of loans and category year 2007 to 2016 , first in 2007 total number of loan was 15k and the treand was increase 15k to 20k , and last 2016 the treand increase 20 k to 22k , while the loan by category 2016 , childreans fiction and adults fiction 38% , childreans DVDs or Adults audio books approxmately 1-2% , childrens non-fiction and adults non-fiction was 6-13% , last is youngs adults was 2% .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some main features, the reporting is fragmented and lacks a clear, analytical overview. You have attempted to describe the data, but the lack of sufficient detail and the failure to reach the word count limit mean the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the trends and comparisons, and expand on the data points to meet the length requirement. Ensure all parts of the prompt are covered with sufficient detail.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear structure. The paragraphs are poorly defined, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'firstly' and 'however', but they are not used effectively to link ideas logically. The text feels like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report. To improve, focus on using clear paragraphing: one for the introduction/overview, and separate paragraphs for the different charts. Use a wider range of linking words to connect your sentences and ensure the flow of information is logical and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'information', 'total number', and 'increase'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'pi chart' (pie chart), 'majorty' (majority), 'treand' (trend), and 'childreans' (children's). The use of '15k' and '20k' is acceptable in a report, but the overall range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate a higher level of proficiency. To improve, try to incorporate more varied verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'proportion', and 'segment'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the chart give', 'adults... was'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to read. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and pluralization. Practice using complex sentences with subordinating conjunctions to add variety and improve the accuracy of your writing.
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