Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pi chart, table and bar chart give the information of age of member at Little Chalfont Library. The category of books borrowed in 2016. The diffrence of loans in 2007 and 2016.
Overall adults age between the 18 and 64 are largest group of members in library. Smallest group of age in library is Adults 65 and over. Fivtion books were very popular category for childrens and adults. The number of loans is increased over in 10 years despite in 2013. In 2013 the number of loan is decreased.
Adults between 18 and 64 is largest group member followed by children is 22%. Yong adults have 15% members in library and smller group is Adults 65 and over its has only 12% members.
Regarding borrowed things adult fiction and children fiction are equally popular books to borrow both have 38% loan. After this there is slightely diffrent in Children non-fiction and adult non-fiction. Children DVDS and Young adults book are very low use books in library.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the age demographics and the popularity of different book categories. However, the reporting of the data is inconsistent. While you mention the age groups and the popularity of fiction, the description of the trends in the bar chart is vague and lacks precise data points. For instance, you mention the number of loans increased but do not provide specific figures or years to support this. To improve, ensure you select key data points (e.g., percentages or specific loan numbers) to illustrate your points rather than making general statements. The overview is present but could be more clearly integrated into the structure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'After this' and 'Regarding borrowed things' are used, but the transition between ideas is often abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between the library membership and the loan trends is not explicitly linked. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and lacks precision. You use basic terms like 'largest group', 'smallest group', and 'very popular'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'pi chart' (pie chart), 'diffrence' (difference), 'Fivtion' (fiction), 'childrens' (children), and 'Yong' (young). These errors do not necessarily impede communication, but they do limit the score. To improve, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'account for', 'fluctuate', or 'marginal', and pay closer attention to spelling accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are some attempts at complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'Adults between 18 and 64 is largest group member' (missing articles and subject-verb agreement) and 'its has only 12% members' (incorrect pronoun usage). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are issues with sentence boundaries and article usage throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles (a/an/the). Incorporating more complex structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, would also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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