Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The charts and data illustrates the information about the local public library in a specific town known as Little Chalfont.
The pie chart describes that there are total four categories on the basis of age groups in the year 2016 in which the members of the library are divided;Moreover the highest age group of member visiting the library are adults between the age group of 18-64 with the ratio of 51% ,and the lowest are senior citizens with 12% of ratio.
The table gives the information about the total loans by categories in the same year i.e, 2016.Additionally the maximum loan groups are Children's fiction and Adult fiction with total 38%, and the least loan group is children's DVD's with only 1% of ratio.
Last but not the least the given bar graph shows the information about the total number of loans taken by the members between the year 2007 to 2016. The bottommost bar of the loan is in the year 2007 with approx 16,000, and the leading bar in the described graph is in the year 2016 with approx 23,000.
Overall, there are many ups and down between the years 2007 and 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have successfully identified the main features of all three charts. You provided a clear overview of the age groups, loan categories, and the trend over time. However, the response lacks a cohesive 'overview' paragraph that synthesizes the data effectively; instead, the summary is fragmented. While you mention the highest and lowest figures, the comparison between categories could be more analytical. To improve, ensure you group related information more logically and provide a more distinct summary of the overall trends rather than just listing individual data points. The task is addressed, but the depth of analysis is somewhat limited.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For example, phrases like 'The charts and data illustrates' and 'Last but not the least' are used in a formulaic way. The transition between the description of the pie chart and the table is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas flows more naturally from one sentence to the next without relying on repetitive sentence starters.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, such as 'senior citizens', 'categories', and 'approx'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For instance, using 'ratio' to describe percentages is technically incorrect; 'proportion' or simply 'percentage' would be more appropriate. Additionally, 'The charts and data illustrates' contains a subject-verb agreement error. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for data reporting and ensure that your word choices are contextually accurate. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The charts and data illustrates' (subject-verb agreement) and 'there are total four categories' (missing article). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of semicolons and commas. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency of the text. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, and try to incorporate more varied complex sentence structures with greater accuracy.
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