Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In this data all the information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. The pie chart illustrates different age group of library members and the table gives information about several categories about books. While the bar chart compares number of loans taken from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, adults and children has highest figures rather than youngsters and older people. Moreover, adult fiction and children's fiction category recorded at biggest proportion. While children's DVD, young adults and adult audio books had a lowest ratio. The number of loans highest taken in 2010 to 1012 and 2014 to 2016.

In the pie chart, young adults whose age between 13 to 17 and older people shared almost similar numbers in membership which was at 12 and 15 respectively. However, the people who are 18 to 64 had a greatest proportion in membership and it accounted at 51. The second large ratio was recorded by children and it was 22. Furthermore, the table shared loans by category from that the children's fiction and adult fiction had exact same percentage which was 38%. Above 10% book is only one and its name was adult non-fiction. Other categories remain under the 6% to 1%.

The bar chart shows comparison about number of loans. Starting from 2007 to 2009, it showed fluctuation but it was started from 15,000 to around 19,000. Afterwards, 2010 to 2012 the figures made up stability which was under 21,000 and also it increased a little bit after 2009. Then, in 2013 to 2016, the graph inclined gradually and reached up to 23,000 numbers of loans.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all three charts, identifying key features and making comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention the highest and lowest categories, you do not always clearly link the data to the specific years or categories in a way that makes the trends easy to follow. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the most significant trends across all three data sets. To improve, ensure that your overview highlights the most striking differences or patterns rather than just listing individual data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific chart. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'While' and 'Furthermore' to start sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the third paragraph where the connection between the data and the categories could be smoother. The flow between sentences is generally functional but lacks the sophisticated linking required for a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'proportion', 'fluctuation', and 'inclined'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'recorded at biggest proportion' instead of 'accounted for the largest proportion' and 'made up stability'. Some phrasing is repetitive, and there is a lack of more precise, academic vocabulary that would elevate the response. Focusing on collocations and more varied reporting verbs will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('adults and children has highest figures') and article usage ('the number of loans highest taken'). There are also issues with prepositional usage and sentence fragments. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past data.

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