Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The pie chart, table and bar chat detail a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Overall, it is apparent that the percentage of adults in library members occupied the leading position. The percentages of Children's fiction and Adult fiction are ranked the first. In addition, there is an increase in the figure for loans from 2007 to 2016.
According the pie chart, we can see the percentage of adults in library members ranked the lead with 51 percent, followed by that of children with 22 percent. The percentage of young adults was similar to that of adults 65 and over with about 13 percent. However, in table it is clear that the percentage of Children's fiction which, was equal to that of adult fiction, reached the first. And the percentage of adult non-fiction was double to that of children's non-fiction. The other three items was similar, and its about 1 or 2 percent.
Turning to the bar chat, it is clear that the number of loans initially rose from more than 15000 in 2007 to more than 20000 in 2011, and experienced a fluctuation between 2011 and 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
你成功识别了所有三张图表的主要特征。你提供了清晰的概述，并选择了相关数据点来支持你的总结。然而，对表格的分析略显混乱；你提到 'Children's fiction' 和 'adult fiction' reached the first，但数据表明它们是相等的，且你用 'similar' 来描述其他项目显得过于模糊。为了改进，请确保明确列出所提类别的具体数字，以提供更精确的比较。你很好地涵盖了任务的所有部分，但如果能对各类别进行更具体的比较，而非仅仅罗列，分析的深度将会得到提升。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
文章逻辑分段清晰，包含引言、针对不同图表的正文段落以及总结性概述。你使用了一些衔接词，如 'Overall', 'In addition' 和 'Turning to'，这有助于信息的流畅表达。然而，一些过渡显得有些生硬，指代有时不够明确，例如在句子 'The other three items was similar' 中。为了获得更高的分数，尝试变换连接词，并确保代词或指代词能清晰地指向你所讨论的具体数据类别。
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
你拥有足够的词汇量来传达信息，使用了如 'percentage', 'fluctuation' 和 'occupied the leading position' 等术语。然而，在词汇选择和搭配上存在一些不准确之处，例如 'ranked the lead' 应改为 'ranked first' 或 'leading'，以及 'bar chat'（应为 'chart' 的拼写错误）。短语 'reached the first' 也不自然。为了改进，请专注于使用更精确的学术搭配，并确保校对拼写错误，这些错误会影响报告的专业基调。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
你展示了简单句和复杂句的结合。虽然意思基本清晰，但存在多处语法错误，如主谓一致问题（'The other three items was similar'）和介词使用不当（'According the pie chart'）。此外，还有一些表达显得生硬，如 'percentage of adults in library members'。虽然这些错误不影响交流，但出现频率较高，限制了分数的提升。请重点检查动词形式和介词，以确保句子语法正确。
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