Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The chart illustrate the details about a total loans category, library members as well as total number of loans issued at public library in the Little Chalfont from 2007 to 2016.
Examining the information about category of total loans. The highest proportion was noted for children's fiction and adult's fiction books at 38% for each, indicating a dominant category among others. 13% accounted for adult non-fiction books, showing the second preference. However, minimal figures were observed for other sector.
By 2016, the highest proportion of library member was adult at around 18 to 64 age group, showing a peak popularity at around 51%. The second group of library members were noted for young adults from 13 to 17. In contrast, only 125 and 15% recorded for children and citizens.
Moreover, evaluate the total number of loans between 2007 and 2016. The figure was observed slight fluctuation and became stable at the end, it ranging from nearly 15,000 in 2007 to more than 22,000 in 2016.
Overall, the highest proportion of loans category accounted for children's non-fiction book and adult's fiction books. Adult were the most dominant age group of library member. The total number of loan was showed slight upward trend with minimal fluctuations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all three charts provided. You successfully identify the main features, such as the dominant loan categories and the primary age group of library members. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks depth in making comparisons. For instance, while you mention the percentages for loan categories, you do not explicitly compare them to the 'other' sectors effectively. Additionally, there is a slight inconsistency in the summary: you mention 'children's non-fiction' in the conclusion, but the body paragraph refers to 'children's fiction'. Ensuring data accuracy is vital for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific chart. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'In contrast', and 'Overall' to signal transitions. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed, and some referencing is unclear, such as 'minimal figures were observed for other sector' without specifying which sector. The use of cohesive devices is sometimes repetitive or slightly mechanical. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence clearly relates to the previous one would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'dominant', 'fluctuation', and 'upward trend'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'total loans category' instead of 'categories of loans' and 'other sector' instead of 'other sectors'. There are also minor errors in pluralisation, such as 'Adult were' instead of 'Adults were'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('The chart illustrate', 'The figure was observed slight fluctuation') and article usage. Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are slightly awkward in their construction. To improve, focus on ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that sentence structures are grammatically sound. The errors present do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to limit the score.
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