Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrate that which gives the information little chalfont library of the public library and its features in the report writing.

The pie chart shows the age of the library member and the total loans by 2016 the children fiction in 2016 is 38% further more, the adult fiction is the same to the children fiction. The young adult between the age 13 to 17 the loan by category was least to 2% in addition the most least children DVD was only 1% in 2016 in addition to, the adult and over age was more then all. The total number loans 2007 to 2016 loan increase every years. In 2007 rise the number of loan increase in the year reached 15000 after that the years 2010,2011,2015 and 2016 in these years the number of loans was equal and rised 20000.

In the conculsion total loans by category the children fiction and adult fiction was equal in 2016 reached 38% after that, total number of loans 2007 to 2016 in these years the most down numer of loans in 2007 then after that every year rised.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response attempts to address the task by describing the provided charts. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and often inaccurate manner. For example, the claim that 'adult fiction is the same to the children fiction' at 38% is clear, but the description of the line graph is confusing, particularly the interpretation of the data points for 2010, 2011, 2015, and 2016. The report lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and some data points are misinterpreted or poorly explained, which limits the overall clarity of the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'in addition to' and 'further more' appearing in awkward positions. The conclusion repeats information already stated in the body paragraphs rather than synthesizing the main features. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the connection between the data categories and the trends described. The overall structure is present but lacks the necessary flow to reach a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'most least' (a tautology), 'rised' (incorrect verb form), and 'down numer'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends, relying on basic descriptors like 'increase' or 'equal'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the presence of non-standard phrasing significantly hinder the sophistication of the response. To improve, the student should focus on learning specific collocations for describing data, such as 'a steady increase' or 'remained constant'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The pie chart illustrate'), incorrect verb tenses ('rised'), and awkward sentence construction ('The pie chart shows the age of the library member and the total loans by 2016 the children fiction in 2016 is 38%'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and missing commas. While the student attempts some complex ideas, the lack of control over basic sentence structure and tense consistency keeps the score in the lower range.

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