Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart displays the information about age of the library members in 2016, and bar chart illustrates the information about the total figures of the loans with the numbers of years.
Overall, the adults age group of 18-64 spent the most time in the library, and children use the less time in the library.
Firstly, the children's fiction gets the 38% loan and children's non-fiction only received the 6%. Likewise, the young adults and adult audio books gain the equal number of loans just over 2%.
Secondly, in 2007 the peoples get the 15,000 loans and amount of loan progressively rise with time and in 2011 reached the 20,000 moneys. The figures of the amount were decline in 2013 only 16,000 and then again, the prices of the loans claim and reached the 21,000 in 2016.
Moreover, the children only use the 12% time in the library, and the young adults among the age group of 13-17 spent the just over 15%. The adult age group of 18 to 64 spent the highest numbers of time 51%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have identified the main features of the charts, such as the age distribution and the loan trends over time. However, the response lacks a clear, logical structure. You have mixed information about the library usage (pie chart) with the loan data (bar chart) in a way that makes comparisons difficult. For example, you discuss the pie chart in the first paragraph, then the bar chart in the second, and then return to the pie chart in the final paragraph. To improve, you should group all information related to the pie chart together and all information related to the bar chart together, ensuring a clear summary of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Moreover' is mechanical and does not effectively link the data points. Furthermore, the information is not logically grouped; jumping back and forth between the pie chart and the bar chart makes the report difficult to follow. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus—for instance, one paragraph for the library membership/usage data and another for the loan trends over time—and use transition words to connect related ideas rather than just listing facts.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of inaccurate word choice. For example, you use 'moneys' and 'prices' to refer to the number of loans, which is incorrect; 'loans' or 'figures' would be more appropriate. You also use 'claim' instead of 'climbed' or 'increased'. There is some repetition of basic terms like 'amount' and 'number'. To reach a higher band, try to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'proportion', and avoid using informal or incorrect nouns when describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the adults age group of 18-64 spent the most time', 'the peoples get the 15,000 loans', and 'the figures of the amount were decline'. There is a lack of control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that you use the correct tense when describing past data. Proofreading for small errors like articles ('the') and pluralisation will also help.
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