Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The data represents the information of a Little Chalfont about a public library.

Overall, it illustrates age of library members such as children, young adults, adults and over adults followed by total number of loans applied from 2007 to 2016.

Mostly, in 2016 adults required 51% space in library, next continued by children 22% and young adults and over adults occupies accurate space 12% and 15%. Moreover, there are categories in applying loans such as; children's fiction 38%, non-fiction 6%, DVDs 1%, young adults 2%, adult fiction 38%, non-fiction 13% and audio books 2%.

On the other hand, the loans approved in between 2007 and 2016 is being held. From 2007 to 2009 loans taken above 15,000. In 2010, there is a increase in loan amount above 20,000 and it is continued till 2016. In contrast, there is a decrease in amount below 20,000 in 2013 same as 2009

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some key features of the charts, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear, cohesive summary. The description of the data is often confusing; for example, referring to '51% space in library' is inaccurate as the chart refers to library members. Furthermore, the trends described for the loan figures are difficult to follow and do not accurately reflect the visual data provided. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview, select the most significant data points, and verify that your descriptions align precisely with the labels provided in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the use of 'Mostly' to start a paragraph or 'is being held' to describe a trend. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the connection between the different charts. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that contributes to the overall summary of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used inaccurately. Phrases like 'required 51% space' and 'occupies accurate space' are unnatural and do not convey the intended meaning regarding the percentage of library members. There is also a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language for trends. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data analysis, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable', and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'young adults and over adults occupies'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often poorly constructed or contain errors that affect the flow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex ones. Pay close attention to verb tenses, especially when describing past data, and ensure that your punctuation is used correctly to separate distinct ideas.

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