Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The charts illustrate data about citizen library in a urban area which is little Chalfont.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that mainly three type of categories which are children, adults, young adults and adults 65 and over in 2016. The highest categories in adults. In bar charts information about total number of loan picked point in 2016. Moreover lowest point in 2007.
Highest numbers of percentage in adults in little Chalfont library. while lowest category in adults 65 and over in at 12. Hover compar to table chart downd trand in children DVDs around 1%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Because the response is only 96 words, the information provided is highly fragmented and lacks the necessary depth to fully summarise the charts. While you attempted to identify some categories, the analysis is superficial and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the data points. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including a clear overview and detailed reporting of the main features with supporting data, while meeting the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the misuse of 'Hover' (likely meant 'However') and 'while'. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to understand which data points are being discussed. To improve, focus on using transition words to link sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that contributes to the overall summary of the charts.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to describe the data accurately. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'citizen library' instead of 'public library', 'picked point' instead of 'data point', and 'downd trand' instead of 'downward trend'. These errors, combined with the limited range of vocabulary, make the writing feel basic and occasionally confusing. You should work on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuation', 'proportion', 'significant', and 'decline', to improve the precision of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'The highest categories in adults', which lacks a verb, and 'In bar charts information about total number of loan picked point in 2016', which is a sentence fragment. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent throughout the text. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a subject and a verb, and practicing the correct use of prepositions and articles.
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