Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts provide information about a library used by public in a town named Little Chalfont.
Overall, the town`s library shows us the number of loans taken by poeple of different ages from [redacted phone] according to the category of books. Adults of about 18-64 involved in greatest number in taking loan of books. While the adults of 65 and over were least concerned about taking advantage from books.
If we look at the category of books in which people show great interest it is children`s fiction and adult fiction. Their percentage of loan is equal in 2016. 22 children take books as a loan. Further, 15 young adults took 2 percent of books.
It is important to note that adult of 18-64 took the most loan of books which include fiction and non fiction 38 percent and 13 percent respectively.
The number of loans increased as well as decreased during [redacted phone].
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the charts, but it fails to provide a clear, accurate overview of the main trends. The data interpretation is problematic; for instance, the claim that '22 children take books as a loan' and '15 young adults took 2 percent' is confusing and does not clearly relate to the provided visual data. The report lacks a cohesive summary of the key features, and the comparison between categories is underdeveloped. The information is presented in a fragmented way, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall trends in library usage. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant data points and grouping them logically rather than listing isolated figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into short paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'If we look at' and 'It is important to note that'. The connection between sentences is often disjointed, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the percentages. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively separate the different aspects of the data, leading to a lack of flow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple phrasing like 'number of loans' and 'taking loan of books'. There are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'involved in greatest number in taking loan' and 'least concerned about taking advantage from books', which sound unnatural. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'accounted for', and 'remained stable', while ensuring they are used in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'library used by public' (missing article), 'poeple' (spelling), and 'adult of 18-64 took the most loan' (subject-verb agreement and article usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of backticks instead of standard apostrophes. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors limits the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and proofreading for basic spelling errors would lead to a more accurate and professional-looking response.
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