Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart demonstrates the data of (loan taken by different catagories) of a public library located in a town which is named as little Chalfont.
Overall, the amount of loan taken by all catagories in year 2016 is mentioned in the given chart. The highest amount of the loan taken by the adults from age 18 year to 64 year, whereas, children took minimum amount of loan.
Firstly, loan taken for children's fiction was 38% in 2016, while 6% was the total loan which took for children's non fiction activities. Secondly, the average of loan was 1% for children's DVDs in the same year, which was the lowest amount of children's loan. Thirdly, if we talk about young adults of age 13 year to 17 year, the loan taken was 2% it was a great difference as compare to the children.
Lastly, adults fiction consumed loan for about 38% which was same as children's fiction. For adult's non-fiction activities the amount was 13%, which was doubled than children's amount. In case of audio books for adults the loan was taken around 2%, which was twice than children's average.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features of the chart, such as the high percentage of fiction loans for both adults and children. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. The description of the data is occasionally inaccurate, such as the claim that children took the 'minimum amount of loan' without clarifying if this refers to the total volume or specific categories. Furthermore, the comparison between categories is sometimes confusing, particularly when discussing the 'average' of loans. To improve, ensure that the overview clearly synthesises the main trends rather than just listing individual data points, and verify that comparisons are mathematically accurate based on the provided figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Thirdly', and 'Lastly'. The progression of ideas is occasionally disjointed, particularly in the transition between the general overview and the specific data points. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect sentences more naturally, and ensure that the logical flow between the introduction, body paragraphs, and the summary is smoother.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'loan taken by different catagories' and 'consumed loan for about 38%'. The word 'catagories' is also misspelled. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology related to data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'accounted for', or 'figures'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repeating the same words throughout the text and will make your writing more engaging and professional.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the total loan which took for children's non fiction activities' and 'which was doubled than children's amount'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of comparative structures will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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