Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates age of library members and the table depicts the total loans taken by category in little chalfont library in 2016 . While the bar chart illustrates the total number of loan between 2007 to 2016 .

Overall, maximum member are adults from 18-64 age mostly use library ,however , the highest loan taken by children's fiction and adult fiction categories while the highest loan take by these categories in 2016.

The most member of library had adult 18-64 , which was more than a half. Moreover, children's fiction and adult fiction taken the highest loan , which was similar proportion 38% . Although other categories were taken least loan ,which average accounted for 13% and less than this .

However ,from 2007 to 2016 ,at the beginning categories take the amount almost 15,000 . Moreover, it gradually increased and the amount became more than 20,000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, such as the dominant age group and the loan trends. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision. For example, the statement that 'children's fiction and adult fiction' had a 'similar proportion 38%' is unclear, as it is not specified if this is a combined total or individual. Furthermore, the description of the bar chart data is vague; stating the amount was 'almost 15,000' and 'more than 20,000' lacks the specific data points required for a high-scoring Task 1 response. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated to highlight the most significant trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Moreover' and 'However' are used frequently but do not always logically connect the ideas. The referencing is sometimes confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the sentence structure makes it difficult to distinguish between the different charts. The progression of ideas is present but feels disjointed due to the repetitive sentence starters and the lack of sophisticated linking words to guide the reader through the data comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'illustrates', 'taken', and 'amount'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'maximum member are adults' instead of 'the majority of members are adults' and 'other categories were taken least loan' instead of 'other categories accounted for the fewest loans'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the presence of errors in word form and usage prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('maximum member are'), incorrect article usage ('the highest loan take'), and awkward phrasing ('which was more than a half'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before periods and commas. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader and indicate a lack of control over more complex grammatical forms.

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