Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given diagrams illustrate the detail data of a public library in a town known as Little chalfont. Overall, diagrams include age of library users as well as total loan granted by library in various categories over the time periods.
In 2016, adults aged group 18-64 years used the library accounted as a highest members than any other age group. Similarly, Children counted as second largest member of the library. However, young adults and aged group 65 years or above counted least 12 and 15 respectively.
Total loan taken by little chalfont library divided into various categories such as children’s friction and adult friction book has the highest loan accounted 38% then other categories. However, DVDs for children has least loan that is 1% taken by the library. Moreover, adult non-friction and children’s non-friction loan was 13% and 6% repectively. Young adults book has 2% and adult audio books has 2% loan in the yaear 2016.
Similarly, in the given bargraph, it shows flucuated total number of loan taken by the little chalfont library in the year between [redacted phone]. In 2016, highest loan garnted for the library about 23,000. In 2011 and 2015 same 22,000 amount taken as a loan. In 2014, 2012, and 2010 total loan was 21,000. In the year 2008 ans 2009 similar loan was issued, however in 2007 has the least loan of 16,000 taken by the library over the year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key features such as the dominant age group (18-64) and the highest loan category (adult fiction). However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, relying on a list-like approach rather than synthesizing the data effectively. There are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, the text mentions 'adult friction' instead of 'fiction', and the interpretation of the bar graph is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping related data points and highlighting significant trends or contrasts rather than listing every figure individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each addressing a specific chart. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and occasionally mechanical (e.g., 'Similarly', 'However', 'Moreover'). The transition between the description of the age groups and the loan categories is abrupt. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, the referencing is sometimes weak, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and better referencing techniques to avoid repetitive sentence structures.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'friction' instead of 'fiction', 'garnted' instead of 'granted', and 'yaear' instead of 'year'. These errors, while not impeding communication, demonstrate a lack of control over more specific terminology. To improve, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'accounted for', and ensure careful proofreading to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('loan granted' vs 'loans granted'), missing articles, and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'Children counted as second largest member'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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