Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Many parents said The Little Chalfont Library is so important and popular library in other libraries.Because this library’s children’s fictions and adults fictions are most read.This two percentages is 38% so considerable fictions.Why are these two fictions read more than others?That’s why parents always want to their kids to be smart.Moreover the age of library members the most huge members age is the adults in 18-64 their percentage is 51% adults is like a reading books.Reading books is their biggest hobby and they can make it easier to learn.And The Little Chalfont Library’s most popular year is 2016.In 2016they make a 20,000people.Furthermore the most less year is 2007.Because they are it had just opened and not yet common.And the most less members is adults 65 and over.An the mos less book is children’s DVD.Because childrens don’t know how to use DVD’s.At the end this library is popular in children’s and adults.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided charts, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a logical selection of main features. The analysis is fragmented and relies on personal speculation (e.g., 'parents always want their kids to be smart') rather than objective reporting of the data. While some figures are mentioned, the lack of a structured summary and the inclusion of irrelevant commentary prevent the response from fully meeting the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. The information is not presented in a professional or analytical manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is no clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'Because' and 'And' to start sentences. The flow of information is disjointed, and the lack of logical sequencing between the different charts makes the report confusing for the reader. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to determine which data point is being discussed.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student frequently uses basic terms like 'most less' (instead of 'lowest') and 'fictions' (incorrectly used as a countable noun). There is a lack of academic vocabulary appropriate for describing data, such as 'proportion,' 'fluctuation,' or 'trend.' The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'the most huge members age,' which hinders clarity. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning collocations related to data analysis and expanding their range of descriptive adjectives and nouns.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This two percentages is'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragments or run-on sentences, such as 'In 2016they make a 20,000people.' The lack of punctuation and correct capitalization further complicates the text. The student relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex constructions are consistently inaccurate. Significant work on basic sentence construction and grammar rules is required.

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