Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart provides details about a public library located in city called Little Chalfont.

Overall, it is evident that the adults experienced the largest share, whereas young adults from 13 to 17 age shared the lowest. In addition, children's fiction remained most famous among people.

Initially, in 2016 adults from an age of 18 to 64 recorded the largest proportion, standing at 51%. Meanwhile 22% children showed in library and young adults whom age were 13 and 17 accounted for 15%. In addition, the lowest ratio was recorded for adults 65 and over which was 12%.

Secondly, there were different categories of loan, in 2016 children's fiction and Adult fiction both categories recorded the same percentage which was 38%. Furthermore, the figures for adult non-fiction and children's non fiction were 13% and 6%, respectively. Young adults and adult audio books both were remained same, the figure stood at 2%. However, children's DVDs were least common and the proportion was only 1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends and categories. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention the percentages for 2016, you do not provide a clear comparison between the two charts or highlight the most significant changes over time. The overview is present but could be more analytical by grouping data more effectively rather than just listing figures. To reach a higher band, ensure you synthesise the data to highlight trends rather than just reporting individual data points in isolation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition', 'Meanwhile', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel forced. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'young adults and adult audio books both were remained same', where the grammatical structure hinders the logical connection. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between the overview and the body paragraphs would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'recorded', 'shared', and 'remained'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'children's fiction remained most famous', where 'popular' would be more appropriate. Additionally, 'young adults whom age were 13 and 17' is grammatically and lexically imprecise. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'a significant proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'city called Little Chalfont' (missing article), 'young adults whom age were 13 and 17' (incorrect relative pronoun and verb agreement), and 'both were remained same' (incorrect passive voice). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are issues with sentence boundaries and word order. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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