Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given charts illustrate the data about a public library in a town known as Little Chalfont.
Overall, it is apparent that in 2016, the majority of members are adults between 18 to 64 years old, whereas the adults over 65 years old holds smallest proportion of percentage. the total loan taken by children's fiction and adult fiction are the highest in the exact mentioned year.
To commence, it is noticeable that, the largest proportion was accounted for adults between 18-64 years old by 51% then, nearly greater than a tenth of proportion is made up of children whereas, the adults over 65 and young adults between 13-17 years old are marginally same with only 3% difference, 15% and 12% respectively.
It is evident that, the total number of loans taken by members has been increased by roughly 5,000 from 2007 to 2016. Moreover, the greatest percentage (38%) was constituted by children and adult fiction afterwards, the second most loan is taken by adult non-fiction by 13%. Post hoc, 6% of total loan was represented for children's non-fiction, following that, young adults and adult audio books remain on 2%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age distribution of members and the loan categories. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with data from the charts. However, there are some inaccuracies in your reporting; for instance, you state that 'children's fiction and adult fiction' are the highest, but the chart shows 'Children's fiction' and 'Adult fiction' as separate categories. Additionally, the phrase 'marginally same' is imprecise. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are described with greater precision and that categories are clearly distinguished to avoid confusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To commence', 'Moreover', and 'It is evident that' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced, such as 'Post hoc', which is not used in the correct context for this type of report. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two different charts. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally to ensure a smoother flow between sentences and ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'constituted', and 'represented'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'holds smallest proportion of percentage' (which is redundant) and 'remain on 2%'. There are also minor errors in phrasing that slightly impact the sophistication of your writing. To achieve a higher score, try to use more precise academic vocabulary and avoid redundant phrasing. Focus on collocations like 'accounted for' or 'comprised' rather than 'represented for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the total loan... are the highest' (subject-verb agreement), 'the adults over 65 years old holds' (subject-verb agreement), and missing articles or incorrect punctuation throughout. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to limit your score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent use of articles to improve the accuracy of your writing.
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