Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart and bar diagram illustrates details about a public library in a town named little Chalfont.

Overall, in the pie chart adults consistently accounts for the largest proportion. Where the young adults and adults who are 65 and over follow similar trajectory. Furthermore, children making up 22%.

However, there is a fluctuation between the years 2007 to 2011. In the year 2011 it holds the consistently accounts for the highrst proportion among 2007 to 2011. Where the lowest proportion among all the years is 2007 with approximately 16,000.

Furthermore, there has been a noticable dicrease after the year 2012 up to 2014 with 21,000 approximately and afterwards there has been a marginal increase in the years 2015 to 2016. where the highest number of loans are in the year 2016 in addition the lowest total number of loans is the year 2007. Mainly there is a little fluctuation through out the perioed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the age distribution and the trend in library loans. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. The description of the bar chart is confusing; for instance, you mention a 'fluctuation' between 2007 and 2011, but the data shows a clear upward trend. Furthermore, the data points cited (e.g., 16,000 for 2007) are not clearly linked to the specific visual information provided. To improve, ensure you accurately interpret the data trends and provide more precise comparisons between the different years and categories rather than just listing numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused. For example, starting a sentence with 'Where' is grammatically incorrect in this context, and the transition 'Furthermore' is used repeatedly without clear logical connection between the ideas. The flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the essay read more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors that occasionally impede clarity. You use basic terms like 'fluctuation' and 'proportion' correctly, but there are spelling errors such as 'noticable', 'dicrease', 'highrst', and 'perioed'. Additionally, the phrasing 'follow similar trajectory' is slightly unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends—such as 'upward trend', 'plateaued', or 'significant decline'—and ensure that your spelling is accurate throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, such as 'adults consistently accounts' (should be 'account') and 'children making up' (which is a fragment). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several sentences starting with 'Where' or 'Mainly', which are not appropriate for formal report writing. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.

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