Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This chart illustrates the information about the of books loaned from a public library named Little Chalfont by members of different age category.
Firstly the pie charts demonstrate the age of library members in four sections. Adults ranging from 18 years to 64 years comprise 51% of the members of the library and is highest in the percentage. Second highest value is by childern that is 22%. 15% are the adults ranging from 65 years to more older. And lastly 12% of the members are young adults from age 13 years to 17 years.
The numbers of book loans increased gradually from 2007 to 2016. In 2007, the number of loaned books was just over 15,000 while by the 2016 , the number of loaned books reached above 20,000. in 2008 and 2009 , quantity of loaned books were below 20,000 but in the next three years, it was just above the 20,000 and then declined below 20,000 in 2013 and again starting growing in next yaers over 20,000.
In 2016, the category of books which was most borrowed from library wre children"s and adult fiction books that is 38%. while 13% and 6% of the books are adult and children's non-fiction. 2% of the loaned books wereAdult audio books and books for young adults. Lastly, the least category that was borrowed by members were children's DVD that is 1%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age demographics, the trend in book loans over time, and the breakdown of book categories. However, the response lacks a clear overview or summary statement that synthesizes the data. While you have reported the figures, the comparison between the categories could be more analytical. For instance, you mention the percentages but do not explicitly contrast the dominance of fiction with the minimal interest in DVDs. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide a clear 'overview' paragraph that highlights the most significant trends or differences across all three charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Second', and 'Lastly' to structure your points. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'Second highest value is by childern'). The transition between the description of the pie charts and the line graph is abrupt. Improving the use of linking phrases to connect ideas within paragraphs would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, such as 'illustrates', 'comprise', 'gradually', and 'declined'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'more older', 'quantity of loaned books were', and 'least category'. Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'childern' and 'yaers'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary is used in the correct grammatical context. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'quantity... were'), incorrect preposition usage, and punctuation errors (e.g., 'children"s'). Some sentences are slightly disjointed, such as 'Adults... comprise 51%... and is highest in the percentage.' While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the clarity of your writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.
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