Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart, table and bar graph illustrates the data about a public library in a city called Little Chalfont.
Overall, the just more than half percentage was age of adults in library members , total loans had different category where children's fiction and adult fiction was highest percentage but most number of loans was sanction in 2016.
To begin with, the age of library members was categorized by different age where adults 18-64 has 51%, followed by children was less than quarter, similarly age of younger adults 13-17 and adults 65 and over was 12% and 12% respectively.
In contrast, there were several category in loans where the highest percentage in Children's fiction and adult fiction by 38%, succeeded to Adult non- fiction by 13% then less than 10% by children's non-fiction, adult audio books, young adults and children's DVDs. Meanwhile in 2007 the lowest percentage of loan taken but during the period of more than 1500 and less than 22500 loan was sanction.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all three visual elements, but the reporting of data is inconsistent and at times confusing. While you identify the main features, such as the age distribution and the most popular loan categories, the description of the bar chart regarding loan trends over time is unclear and lacks precision. The statement 'most number of loans was sanction in 2016' is vague, and the interpretation of the figures in the final paragraph is difficult to follow. To improve, ensure that data points are cited accurately and that comparisons are made more explicitly between the different categories provided in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, 'To begin with' and 'In contrast' are used, but the sentences following them often lack logical cohesion. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the data from the table and bar chart. Improving the use of cohesive devices to link sentences and clauses more naturally would significantly enhance the readability and logical progression of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. There are several instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'sanction' instead of 'recorded' or 'issued', and 'just more than half percentage' which is grammatically awkward. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'categorized' and 'percentage', but the overall control is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for describing data trends, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'fluctuated', and ensure collocations are accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The given pie chart... illustrates'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'was age of adults in library members'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage would be beneficial.
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