Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The charts represents the information a public library in Little Chalfont. The pie chart illustrate the data of library members of different age groups whereas the bar graph depicts total number of loans by category taken from the yer 2007 to 2016.
Overall, the highest number of people visiting the library were the adults ranging from 18 years to 64 years while to lowest figures are recorded for the adults above 65 in 2016. Much of the loan was observed in the year 2016 whereas, 2007 marked the least number of loans.
In 2016, the library experienced 51% adults of age 18 to 64, which is followed by 22% young adults of age 13 to 17. 15% members of the library were the children whereas, 12% were the elder members over 65 age. Moreover, the greater number of loans were depicted for children and adults for about 38% and the least loans were taken for children’s DVDs which is 1%.
There is a remarkable increase in the total number of loan from the year 2007 to 2016. From the year 2010 to 2016 there were slight fluctuations in the total number of loans.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of both charts, including the age distribution and the loan trends over time. You successfully identified the key trends, such as the growth in loans between 2007 and 2016 and the dominance of the 18-64 age group. However, the analysis of the bar chart is slightly underdeveloped. While you mention the overall increase, you could have provided more specific comparisons between the categories (e.g., comparing the popularity of adult books versus children's books). The data points are generally accurate, but ensure that all figures are clearly linked to the correct categories to avoid ambiguity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into four paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'moreover', and 'in addition', which assist in linking ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the flow between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. The referencing is generally clear, though some sentences, such as the final one regarding fluctuations, lack a strong connection to the preceding data analysis. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the overall cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'depicts', 'fluctuations', and 'recorded'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'the charts represents' (should be 'represent') and 'the greater number of loans were depicted for children and adults', which is slightly confusing given the data. You attempt to use specific terminology, but there is room for more precise collocations to describe trends and data points. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the message clearly, but lacks the sophistication required for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement ('The charts represents') and prepositional errors ('loans by category taken from the yer 2007'). Additionally, there are minor issues with article usage and phrasing, such as 'over 65 age' instead of 'over 65 years of age'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic agreement and tense consistency would be beneficial.
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