Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrate data about public library in city called little Chalfont
Overall, it can be clearly seen that age group 18-16 presented with the highest category while adults 65 and over represented with lowest figure. Children's fiction accounted for the highest percentage whereas children's DVDs remained the lowest throughout the period. In 2011 the highest number of loans taken among all years. In contrast, the lowest loans taken in 2007.
Age of library members, adults between 18 to 64 was on top, accounting for 51%. While children stood at 22%. Adults 65 and over and young adults showed almost similar figure 12% and 15% respectively. Total loans by category, an identical proportion observed for children's fiction and adults fiction 38 % each. Adult non fiction showed moderate trend 38%.
Total number of loans , the highest loans taken in 2011 which 20.000 and lowest in 2007 which is 15.000. During 2008 and 2009 showed similar trend 18,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, such as the age demographics and the trends in library loans. However, the response lacks a clear overview of the data as a whole. While you mention some figures, the analysis is somewhat fragmented and lacks a cohesive summary of the trends. For example, you state that 2011 had the highest loans, but you do not contrast this effectively with the overall trend. To improve, ensure you group information logically and provide a more comprehensive summary of the key features at the beginning of your report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. For instance, the transition between the age demographics and the loan categories is abrupt. There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas within and between sentences, which makes the flow feel somewhat disjointed. To improve, try using a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to better connect your points and improve the logical progression of your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'highest' and 'lowest', and some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'presented with the highest category'. There are also minor errors in terminology, such as 'moderate trend' when describing a figure. To improve, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary to describe trends and proportions, such as 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a significant proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'the lowest loans taken in 2007' is a sentence fragment, and 'which 20.000' is grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of decimals and commas. To improve, focus on ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and pay closer attention to article usage and verb tense consistency throughout your writing.
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