Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart ,table and bar graph depict breakdown of little chalfont library . . THE PIE CHART REVEALS THE INFORMATION ABOUT THE AGE OF LIBRARY MEMBERS . THE HIGEST PERCENT OF ADULTS AND THE SECOND HIGHEST WAS CHILDREN . THE LESS THAN QUARTER WAS YOUNG ADULTS AND ADULTS 65 AND OVER . . THE TABLE GIVES DETAIL INFORMATION ABOUT TOTAL LOANS BY CATEGORY [2016] THERE WAS SEVEN STAGES THE HIGHEST WAS CHILDREN FICTION AND THE LOWEST WAS MANY OTHERS
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 80 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you have identified the three charts, the description of the data is extremely superficial. You mention the highest and lowest categories but fail to provide a comprehensive overview or make meaningful comparisons between the data sets. To improve, you must describe the main trends and provide specific data points for all categories presented in the charts. The current response is too brief to allow for a full development of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical paragraphing and structure. The use of excessive spacing and punctuation (such as the repeated periods) creates a disjointed reading experience. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together, making the text feel like a collection of isolated observations rather than a coherent summary. To improve, you should organize your report into a clear introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific body paragraphs that group related data logically. Using linking words like 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' would help improve the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. You rely on simple descriptors like 'highest' and 'lowest' without using a wider range of academic vocabulary to describe trends or data. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'seven stages' to describe categories in a table. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate more precise terminology related to data analysis, such as 'proportion', 'category', 'fluctuation', or 'significant'. Expanding your range of adjectives and adverbs to describe the data more accurately will also be essential for improvement.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, including issues with article usage ('the pie chart, table and bar graph') and sentence structure. The use of capitalization for entire sentences is inappropriate for formal writing. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, as most sentences are simple and repetitive. To improve, focus on using a variety of sentence types, including complex sentences with subordinate clauses. Additionally, ensure that you use correct punctuation and capitalization throughout your work, as these errors currently detract from the professional quality of your report.
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