Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts shows data about a government library in a village known as Little Chalfont for the year of 2016. Overall, in this chart there arey fout groups of age peoples visited children, young adults, adults and adults and over. The given charts illustrate that adults between age 18-64 people's securing highest proportation 51% in the year of 2016, that is more then all remaninig categories. Children were interested to use library in 2016 that precentage 22% with this perporation in 2nd largest. Third category 15% that related to young adults age between 13 to 17, This age group peers less than children from 7%, and more than adults about 3%, who were fall in 4th category that is least only 12%, In this charts Adults 18-64 secured 51% with in the top position and Least is 12% oldags people's in complete year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the data, such as the highest and lowest categories, the analysis is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, structured overview. The description of the data is mechanical, simply listing percentages rather than synthesizing the information effectively. To improve, you should aim to group the data more logically and ensure you provide a clear summary of the trends. Furthermore, the under-length nature of the response means that the task is not fully developed, which is a key requirement for higher band scores.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences; instead, the text relies on repetitive structures like 'In this chart' or 'The given charts illustrate'. The flow is disjointed, and the relationship between the different age groups is not clearly articulated through logical transitions. To improve, you should organize your response into distinct paragraphs—an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs—and use a wider variety of linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your points more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'people's', 'secured', and 'categories'. There are also several errors in word choice and form, such as 'proportation' instead of 'proportion', 'oldags' instead of 'older', and 'remaninig' instead of 'remaining'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To improve, focus on using more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', 'the majority', or 'a significant minority', and ensure you check your spelling carefully before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The charts shows' (subject-verb agreement), 'there arey fout groups' (spelling and article usage), and 'that is more then all remaninig categories' (incorrect comparative 'then' instead of 'than'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when you attempt more complex constructions. There is a lack of variety in sentence patterns, and punctuation is often misused, particularly with comma splices. Focusing on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct comparative forms will help improve your accuracy.
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