Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Charts illustrates an overall annual report of Little Chalfont Library year of 2016. It also shows changes in total number of loans over the period of 9 years starts 2007 till 2016.
Total collaboration of Adults in library members makes around half of portion within 51% ratio witch is greater compare to other ones. Children's got second in line when it comes to membership category within 22% contribution. young adults makes 15% and adults 65 and over makes 12% respectively witch is low as compare to other two categories.
In the year of 2016 children's fiction and adult fiction marks same portion in loan by 38%. Adult non-fiction makes 13% and holds second position. Whereas children's non-fiction makes 6% and young Adults overall contributes only 2% witch is low at all. children's DVD's and adult audio books makes 1% and 2% respectively.
Whereas from 2007 to 2016 total number of loans remains almost same except some specific years like first year and 2013. Although other remains almost
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including membership categories and loan types. However, the final paragraph is incomplete, which prevents a full analysis of the trend data. While the main features are identified, the comparison between categories could be more analytical rather than just listing percentages. The overview is present but lacks depth. To improve, ensure all parts of the prompt are fully addressed and avoid trailing off at the end of the response, as this significantly impacts the ability to provide a comprehensive summary of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'witch' (which) and 'as compare to'. The progression of ideas is logical until the final paragraph, which ends abruptly without completing the thought. Referencing is generally clear, but the lack of a concluding sentence or a finished trend analysis disrupts the overall flow of the report. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'witch' instead of 'which', and some awkward collocations like 'Total collaboration of Adults'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying heavily on basic descriptors. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology for describing data, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'fluctuated'. Additionally, ensure that you proofread for common spelling mistakes and word-choice errors that detract from the professional tone of an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Charts illustrates', 'young adults makes'), incorrect preposition usage, and punctuation errors. The sentence structure is often repetitive, and the incomplete final sentence demonstrates a lack of control over complex structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that complex sentences are constructed accurately. Reviewing basic grammar rules regarding plurals and verb forms will help reduce the frequency of these errors.
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