Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
IN the chart they give the information about a public library little Chalfont town . The little chalfont library the most age of library member are the children . The total loans category in 2016 highest are the children fiction 38 percent . In the maps the total number of loans in 2007 to 2016 are here . IN 2007 the total number of loan in this year highest of fifteen thousand.
And the 2008 the totals loans are eighteen thousand and the next year . The total loans are twenty thousand above in the 2009 .
And 2010 the total loans in this year is twenty thousand above . In the next year 2011 there are the same situation . And next year the loans percentage are the same . And the next five year there are the same situation the loans are above to the twenty thousand above
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the provided charts but fails to clearly distinguish between the two distinct data sets (the pie chart and the line graph). While you mention the children's fiction category and the total loans, the description of the line graph is repetitive and lacks analytical depth. You describe the trends year-by-year in a mechanical fashion rather than grouping them into significant periods or identifying key trends like the overall growth. The summary lacks a clear overview of the main features, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. To improve, focus on identifying the 'big picture' trends first, then support them with specific data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks logical paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. The transition between the pie chart data and the line graph data is abrupt. You rely heavily on repetitive sentence starters like 'And the next year' and 'In the next year', which creates a mechanical flow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; instead, the text feels like a list of observations. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'following this') and organize your response into clear paragraphs: one for the introduction/overview, and one or two for the detailed data analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'highest', 'total', and 'situation'. There is a lack of variety in describing trends, such as 'increased', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'. Furthermore, there are errors in word choice, such as 'the most age of library member', which is grammatically incorrect and imprecise. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'peak', 'period', and 'remained constant'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you describe the data more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the most age of library member'), subject-verb agreement errors ('the total number of loan... are'), and awkward phrasing ('the loans are above to the twenty thousand above'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that prepositions are used correctly. Additionally, try to incorporate more complex structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, to describe the data more effectively.
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