Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts under provide some information according to public library in a city town called as a Little Chalfont.

First of all, it gives us age groups of library members.These are the children, Young adults from 13 to 17, Adults from 18 to 64, Adults 65 and over.It provide us all kind of people.

In this paragraph, we talk about total loans by category.Children's fiction goes to 38%, Children's non-fiction goes to 6%, Children's DVDs 1%, Young adults goes to 2%, Adult fiction goes to 38%, Adult non-fiction goes to 13% and adult audio books held 2%.

Now we talk about total number of loans from 2007 to 2016. In 2007, loan was almost 15000. In 2008, loan was approximately 18000. In 2009, loan was equal to the loan which was in 2008. In 2010, loan was higher than 20,000. In 2011, loan was approximately 21,000. In 2012, loan had equal amount which was in 2010. In 2013, loan was almost lesser than 20,000. In 2014, loan again goes to higher than 20,000. In 2015, loan was almost 21,000 and at last in 2016, loan was higher than all of the previous loans and it was 22,000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, including the age groups, loan categories, and the trend over time. However, the analysis is largely descriptive and lacks meaningful comparison or synthesis. For instance, the report lists percentages and loan figures sequentially without highlighting the most significant trends, such as the dominance of fiction loans or the overall upward trajectory of library usage. The overview is missing, which is a critical requirement for Task 1. To improve, you should group related data points and provide a clear summary of the main trends rather than listing individual figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'In this paragraph, we talk about' and 'Now we talk about' are inappropriate for an academic report; they draw attention to the writing process rather than the data. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, as the transition between the age groups, categories, and the timeline is abrupt. Using more sophisticated linking words such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' would improve the flow and logical progression of your report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'goes to', 'was', and 'held'. There is little attempt to use academic or topic-specific vocabulary to describe trends. For example, instead of saying 'loan goes to higher', you should use terms like 'increased', 'peaked', or 'showed an upward trend'. The phrasing 'city town called as a Little Chalfont' is unnatural and reflects a lack of control over collocation. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and precise terminology for describing data trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage ('a Little Chalfont'), subject-verb agreement ('It provide us'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple and repetitive in their construction. For example, 'In 2007, loan was almost 15000' lacks the necessary articles and pluralization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of complex sentence structures and the persistence of basic errors limit the score. Focusing on correct tense usage and sentence variety will help improve your accuracy and range.

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