Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart, table and bar graph illustrate the data on public library of a town , Little Chalfont.
Overall, the library has been utilized significantly by adults, aged between 18 to 64, while the older people used least. The children's fiction and adult fiction have the same loans and the highest among all, while DVDs were the least in 2016.
To begin with, the adults accounted for 51% of library members, in contrast almost half of it utilized by children at 22%, continue with older adults over the age of 65 and and teenagers between 13 to 17 constitueting for 12% and 15% respectively.
On the other hand, the total counted loans peaked at around 22,000 by 2016 with some fluctuations over the decade. The huge proportion of loans accounted for children's fiction and adult fiction at 38%, followed by 13% and 6% accounted for adult non-fiction and children non-fiction, in contrast the least proportion of loans utilized on young adults and adult audio books at 2%, while the least at 1% individuals took loans for children's DVDs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the library membership and loan data. You successfully identified the main features, such as the dominance of adult members and the peak in total loans by 2016. However, the analysis of the loan categories is slightly confusing; for instance, stating that 'children's fiction and adult fiction' account for 38% combined is a good observation, but the subsequent breakdown of percentages is difficult to follow and lacks clarity regarding the specific data points. To improve, ensure that comparisons are more precise and that the data is grouped logically to highlight the most significant trends rather than listing every figure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'in contrast', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'continue with older adults'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second body paragraph where the list of percentages becomes repetitive and difficult to track. Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider variety of linking phrases would enhance the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing for clear communication of the data. You used some relevant terms like 'utilized', 'fluctuations', and 'constituting'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'total counted loans' instead of 'total number of loans' and 'the least proportion of loans utilized on' which is grammatically awkward. There is also some repetition of the word 'least'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your collocations sound natural in the context of describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist throughout the text. Examples include 'the older people used least' (missing 'the' or 'it'), 'and and teenagers' (repetition), and 'the least at 1% individuals took loans' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.
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