Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided charts illustrate a place known as Little Chalfont's public library. Library used by children to 65 and over aged members, total loans based on categgories in 2016 and the total number of loans borrowed from 2007 to 2016.

In terms of members, adults aged between 18-64 used the library 51% more than others, children gone to library accounted by 22%. Additonally, young adults aged 13-17 comprised by 15%, whereas adults over 65 had least interest in reading books, that is around 12%.

Regarding borrowing patterns, fiction become popular among children's and adult which is accounting similar around 38% from total loans. However, adult non-fiction is represented by 13% while children's non-fiction is contributed half than adult around 6%. Meanwhile, young adults and adult audio books had the smallest share in this category.

Furthermore, the bar chart shows the amount of loans rose 16,000 in 2007 and nearly touch 19,000 in 2008. Afterward, it become stable in 2009, then gradually increased over 20,000 in the next two years. However, the trend of borrowed loans decline in 2012 and then 2013 but again it is sharply inclined towards the peak in the upcoming few years.

Overall, adults aged between 18-64 take most of the advantage of library, fiction among children's and adult borrowed large amount of loans and the trend of loans surge with a little downward trend in 2013.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key features and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the dominant age group (18-64) and the popularity of fiction. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention that children's non-fiction is 'half than adult', but the data shows a more specific relationship. Additionally, the description of the bar chart trends is somewhat imprecise, particularly regarding the specific figures for 2012 and 2013. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited with greater precision and that comparisons are more clearly linked to the provided figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific chart. There is a clear progression of ideas from the membership demographics to borrowing patterns and finally the historical trend. You use cohesive devices such as 'In terms of', 'Additionally', 'Regarding', and 'Furthermore' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'children gone to library accounted by 22%'. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns or references clearly point back to their subjects would enhance the cohesion of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'demographics', 'borrowing patterns', and 'gradually increased'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'children gone to library', 'accounted by', and 'sharply inclined towards the peak'. These errors occasionally make the text feel unnatural. To improve, focus on using collocations correctly (e.g., 'accounted for' instead of 'accounted by') and avoid repetitive phrasing. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and descriptive adverbs will help you achieve a more precise and academic tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and prepositions (e.g., 'fiction become popular', 'children's and adult which is accounting', 'it become stable'). Some sentences are missing articles or have incorrect word order, which occasionally forces the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing data in Task 1 reports.

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